Turning Thoughts

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Non-Fiction  |  House: Booksie Classic

my turning thoughts

Turning thoughts

Round and round I go

On the same merry go round

It’s always the same people

Round and round they go with me

But they don’t seem to notice

What is happening?

The world begins to fade

And all that’s left is this merry go round

Round and round we go

My train of thought never changes

Just the same few things

Go round and round in my head

never leaving me with the answers I need

so round and round I go

round and round on the merry go round

I feel the numbness

I feel the insanity

I feel the world slowly disappear

I can’t seem to focus

What’s right?

What’s wrong?

Round and round I go

Round and round on this never ending merry go round

I can’t seem to shake this feeling

Can’t seem to get off this scary ride

So round and round I go

Feeling dizzy

Feeling sad and anxious

This is my life

Round and round on a merry go round

Round and round I go

Please make it stop

Maybe I’ll fall off

It’s time to stop the merry go round

And sort out this crazy mess

So now they go round and round

Round and round on the merry go round

Maybe they’ll fall off too

But till then they’ll keep going

Round and round

Round and round the merrry go round


Submitted: August 17, 2012

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animallvr4eva

Like I said today, this is great *does happy dance at being the first one to comment*. It's true and I can relate to that which is something a lot of poems lack. Good job :) :) :)

Fri, August 17th, 2012 11:12am

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Thanks, so I guess u can read it now unlike yesterday! Lol.
Glad you like it :)

Fri, August 17th, 2012 9:16pm

Movement

seriously "Happy Dance!!" hahahaha emma lol btw loved the poem xx

Mon, August 20th, 2012 12:31am

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lol!!!
glad you liked the poem :)

Sun, August 19th, 2012 5:33pm

CauseICan

Love this poem. Can relate alot. This drives me cray cray.

Wed, August 22nd, 2012 3:18am

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lol glad u like it :)

Wed, August 22nd, 2012 2:24am

CauseICan

I love it too!. Very relatable-Maria
}:o

Wed, August 22nd, 2012 3:23am

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thanks Maria :)

Wed, August 22nd, 2012 2:27am

Brian W

I am sure many can relate to this... A good poem that captures how we can feel at times...Well written

Wed, August 22nd, 2012 9:12pm

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thank you :)

Thu, August 23rd, 2012 6:32pm

Awaneesh Shukla

eloquent work! a great poem i must say, i like your writing style.. keep up the good work

Fri, August 24th, 2012 9:32am

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Thanks :)

Sat, August 25th, 2012 1:31am

FixMyHeart

wow, wasn't expecting such a kawaii (Japanese...) poem! It reminds me of a book I read when I was little

Tue, August 28th, 2012 9:12pm

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Thanks :)

Tue, August 28th, 2012 3:28pm

Awaneesh Shukla

now that you asked me to read it i dropped by again , and found that i have already commented.. :P so your poem is still great and eloquent. :D. keep up the good work.

Sun, September 9th, 2012 6:15am

Author
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ohhh thanks soooooo much :)

Sun, September 9th, 2012 10:14pm

CheerUp

Very good! Deep and wonderful.

Tue, January 1st, 2013 12:30pm

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Thanks!

Tue, January 1st, 2013 7:28pm

sharmaine1991

Hey I can totally relate! This was a really good poem. I loved the metaphors used and the fact that it's relate-able. The flow was really good too

Tue, October 8th, 2013 10:40pm

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Thanks, it's good when people can relate to the writing you write :) thanks for reading and giving feedback!

Tue, October 8th, 2013 3:47pm

BrittanyBright21

Your writing is so neat and flowy, it is beautiful! I can totally relate with the 'I feel the numbness, I feel the insanity' part. Keep up the good work Rash :)

Mon, January 6th, 2014 11:34pm

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Thanks! Thats good, I like to relate to my readers :) thanks again x

Mon, January 6th, 2014 9:49pm

Madhu Baglari

This is a beautiful piece. It flowed so well. I can totally relate. Good job! :)

Sun, June 15th, 2014 8:40am

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aw thanks love!! much appreciated, thanks for reading xx

Sun, June 15th, 2014 1:43am

Lisa Ayers

Hi Rash, I like this poem for a few reasons. It is real, honest and relatable. I enjoyed the unique style you used to write this. It flowed well from beginning to end.

Mon, July 21st, 2014 3:08am

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Thanks Lisa, I was hoping it would relate to readers well. Thank you for the feedback, much appreciated xxx

Sun, July 20th, 2014 8:15pm

TheHorizonBetweenUs

This was so amazing. SO DAMN GOOD.
One can easily relate to this one. The flow of the poem was beautiful and it was so realistic. The message of the poem could be easily conveyed because that's how it goes, life is a never ending merry go round and we have to keep up with the pace, balance ourselves and there are time when everything's blur and we lose our vision, that is our mind. But you you wrote it so beautifully! Loved this poem :)

Wed, March 18th, 2015 8:52am

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Oh wow thank you so much! Im so glad you liked it and that you think it is relatable. Thank you for the feedback, much appreciate!

Wed, March 18th, 2015 2:08am

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