Unicorn Tears

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Fantasy  |  House: Booksie Classic

Unicorns fascinate me, so I wrote about one.

Have you ever seen a unicorn cry?

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Have you every watched an Eagle fly?

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Have you ever truly felt the rain?

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Have you ever cried out in pain?

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Do you ever feel the air?

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Do you even truly care?

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Have you ever seen a unicorn cry?

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Have you ever kissed the sky?

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Unicorns are the most beautiful

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Thy are the most innocent of creatures

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When a unicorn cries their tears turn into

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Bubbles of happiness and blessings that land on unsuspecting people

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The ones who need them the most

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So have I ever seen a unicorn cry?

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Yes I have

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I see and feel them everyday

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I’m blessed to be alive

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And every time something good to me happens

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I know there is a unicorn up there, waiting for me


Submitted: January 26, 2009

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EAweathefield

The poem started off really well, but the last part was a bit disappointing. I expected a big, pretty culmination of the piece after "Have you ever seen a unicorn cry/Have you ever kissed the sky," but instead it deteriorated from a pretty inspirational poem to something more reminiscent of the emo poems I wrote when I was twelve. This piece has so much potential--I would love to see you edit it!

Tue, January 27th, 2009 11:56pm

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Wow, I love this! Thank you so much!
I KNEW SOMETHING was missing from it! I guarantee an edit! Please come see it!

Tue, January 27th, 2009 4:04pm

EAweathefield

Awwww :)
I much prefer this ending, I have to say. Bubbles of happiness. That's more like it. How refreshingly not-emo.

I'm really glad you took the trouble to rework this--a lot of people are under the mistaken impression that they do not need to edit. A good writer's work is never truly finished.

Wed, January 28th, 2009 6:20am

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Hey, no problem...I agree! Thanks for taking the time to tell me! I feel better about it...it's still missing something, but maybe someone else will come along with a great idea!

Wed, January 28th, 2009 12:37pm

Midnight Rose

So beautiful and touching!

Wed, January 28th, 2009 7:27pm

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Thank you! I think so too!

Wed, January 28th, 2009 12:43pm

Loving Mallory

I was interested in the title so I just had to read it. I thought it was very unique and bold. I loved it. It actually inspired me to take my writing outside the box.I'm working on my first poem right now I'll tell you when it's done.

Mon, February 2nd, 2009 6:38pm

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Oh! That's fantastic! I love to inspire people! Thank you so much! That's like the greatest compliment ever!

Mon, February 2nd, 2009 10:45am

xxemowritingxx

this poem was so beautiful!!!

Fri, September 11th, 2009 2:55pm

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thanks so much

Fri, September 11th, 2009 1:04pm

HK Fowler

so amazing! i

Wed, November 11th, 2009 9:02pm

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i foubnd this poem on google, it is themed for this site i knew nothing about! google my name and you'l;l find it for real

Wed, November 11th, 2009 1:03pm

Cleveland

I enjoyed the sentiments of this poem but at times I thought you might have made it stronger. To ask questions is fine but too many questions weakens the plot. Rather I'd suggest gathering up several ideas and then turn to the audience with something like.

Few have seen a unicorn cry,
Yet many follow where Eagles fly
To that haven in the rain
Free of Earth and harrowing pain.
On mountain top to feel the air,
let face show you care.

Now a word on the other side of the coin about Unicorns. I'm a creative writer exploiting many genre and in that I include fantasy.
The silver hued Unicorn is from an age when myths and legends stayed commonplace to fill us mortals with wonder. Since then has entered the black hearted Unicorn or even the Kitsch(multi horned beast) and then there is from the shadowlands of Amagora the dreaded Black Unicorn. that can be tamed. When it dies it changes to the Tilly Bone Black Unicorn with attributes enough to shock. It reverts to the frozen prance of a stone statue with eyes white flecked as if blinded. But there below its chest lies a flap opf skin concealing eyes that watch the approaching hunter. If the Till Bone Black Unicorn is killed, it means hacking out the concealed eyes then it changes to the Slaughter Bird of black Corbie.For a whole year the anguish of the beast can be heard in an echo through out the mountains and valleys.
Time to say my prayers, I guess.

Sat, June 5th, 2010 7:03am

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:) I was very young when I wrote this poem. I've written many variations because I believe a good writer's work is never done. However, I only posted my originals on here. Thank you for your insight.

Tue, June 8th, 2010 3:38am

sitruc3211820

Ok....this pretty much made my day! Amazing writing! This is something that is going to stick with me a while. You have an amazing writing style! Never ever ever stop with the poems! I could sit and read your stuff for hours and not get bored.

Wed, August 18th, 2010 7:23pm

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aw, thank you! that means a lot to me.

Tue, August 24th, 2010 3:49pm

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