Princes Dorm revised Wonderland scene.

Princes Dorm revised Wonderland scene.

Status: Finished

Genre: Fantasy



Status: Finished

Genre: Fantasy



I took the scene I already had, and made it better.
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I took the scene I already had, and made it better.

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I took the scene I already had, and made it better.

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Submitted: January 10, 2013

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Submitted: January 10, 2013




Then, to supper. Basically a repeat of the previous night except for one minor detail. Derek was writing and walking at the same time, which he had told me was hard for him to do when he walked straight into the Mist. We hadn’t even had the chance to get to know each other yet, so I did the radical thing. I went straight in after him.

It was the strangest feeling I’d ever experienced. I didn’t die, I went somewhere. Somewhere where the trees were made of candy and the air smelled of sweet blossoms. A wise old caterpillar (yes a caterpillar) told me that I had approximately twenty minutes to find the mist in this world before I’d be stuck here forever. I found Derek and we both made our way to… somewhere. In this place, it was always somewhere, never anywhere in particular. We found a little girl in a blue dress and wearing an apron. She told us her name was Alice and she begged us to take her with us. What else could we do but say yes? She had a kitten with her and Derek was allergic, so we threw it down a well.

“Mommy’s sorry, but I’m going to leave you here to die.”

“What the heck is wrong with you? I thought we were going to be together until I died!” yelled the cat, which freaked me out.

“Well, we are, because I’m leaving you here to die!”

So we kept walking. Things were getting, as Alice put it ‘curiouser and curiouser’ as we walked. There was so much strange stuff going on that I just stopped looking.

“You okay?” asked Derek as we walked.

“Yeah, I’m fine. But you’re an idiot for getting us mixed up in this in the first place!” I exclaimed, shoving him teasingly.

“Yeah, stupid of me to write and walk at the same time,” he agreed.

“Where are you from?” I asked.

“Oh, I’m from somewhere.”

“Somewhere? Well, that helps. Where is somewhere?”

“I told you, somewhere. You know, somewhere in Australia.”

“Really, you’re from Down Under? I never would have guessed. Lucky though.”

“How is that lucky?”

“You’ve been somewhere!”

He didn’t catch onto the pun right off the bat, but once he did, he groaned, but he was smiling at the same time, so I knew he didn’t mean it.

“Don’t tell me you make those stupid puns too!”


“Everyone makes puns, and it’s weird.”

“Bet you never heard that one before though.”

“You’re right, I haven’t.”

We went on for a few more minutes. He kept mumbling and looking down at the ground. He was starting to freak me out

“Are you okay?” I finally asked.

“Yeah, I’m fine.” He didn’t sound so sure about that. I cocked an eyebrow. He sighed. “I just don’t want to end up like everyone else in my family. We all work and work and work and nothing good comes from it. We get no credit, no rewards. I go to school and the only thing I get out of it is that the school had a copy of this.”

He reached into his coat pocket and pulled out a little black leather-bound book. On the cover in red was the words “Darkeness Magick.”

“Where did you find that?” I asked.

“I got it from Miss Pendragon. She let me borrow it. I’m copying down as many of the spells as I can. I tell you Vanessa, this is finally going to get me out of this mess. My family’s endless humiliation will finally be revenged.”

“Derek, what would you do?”

“To get what I wanted? I’d do anything. Keep that in mind for later.”

Soon, we had found the mist and went straight into it. We emerged in the Disney dorm, actually, which was weird.

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