"Physco" Part 1: Her End Has Come

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Horror  |  House: Booksie Classic

this is my first horror poam just thought id try somethin different please tell me trutfully how you think of it

"Nice to meat you my name is Ned."

Thats what he said to the voice in his head.

"Phillup's my name but call me Phil.

Now that we met lets make our first deal."

"What kind of deal do you wish to make?'

"See her over there?Her life you must take."

"I know her she's who I first kissed."

"What difference does it make? She wont be missed?"

"How should i do it? Gun or knife?"

"I dont care just take her life!"

So Ned called to her "Come over here Vally?"

"Ned? Is that you?" she asked "We can talk in this ally."

They were deep in the ally then Ned pullde  a gun.

Shot between the eyes. He thought it was fun.


Submitted: June 07, 2009

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angellynn

The rhyme is good. But you really need to check your spelling.. Other than that it was very scary!!!

Angellynn :)

Sun, June 7th, 2009 6:05pm

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ya i know im not that great at spelling and thank you. Ill take that as i should continue to write about Ned and Phil. Ill be sure 2 tell you when i get them posted

Sun, June 7th, 2009 11:19am

Baz

Very good. The tension mounts from the start. And you certainly did't pull any punches at the end. Nice!

Sun, June 7th, 2009 8:57pm

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anything for a little fun i dont know i just had the impolse

Tue, June 16th, 2009 4:36pm

JenDamsel

haha Really good!! i loved it.
great work. keep going ;D

Sun, June 7th, 2009 11:00pm

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ill do my best thanks for reading

Tue, June 16th, 2009 4:33pm

Sunshine Raines

I think we all have a little Phill in us at times. Its a good thing we can keep him in check huh lol. I liked this. S.R.

Mon, June 8th, 2009 1:44am

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thanks i no wht you mean

Tue, June 16th, 2009 4:32pm

viper

It was a little twisted.I noticed some spelling errors.but it had a good rhyme to it.Nice job.

Mon, June 8th, 2009 4:46am

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ya i tend to think a little twisted sometimes thanks

Tue, June 16th, 2009 4:31pm

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