FLASH FICTION CONTEST
Winner - Booksie Spring 2017 Flash Fiction Contest
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Short Story by: Sue Harris
FLASH FICTION CONTEST
“Okay, I’m listening,” Mia barked, her arms folded, green eyes glaring.
Todd steeled himself. “Look, I can explain. Alex is a colleague, we were working together on a project to a deadline. You’re just jumping to conclusions.”
“So I take it she stays at the same hotel when you’re away on business? How convenient.”
“Mia stop.” His eyes dart round the bustling cafeteria. “This is neither the time nor the place.”
Mia leans over and reaches for his hand, her eyes brimming with tears. “You’ve changed Todd, and don’t tell me I’m imagining it. Look into my eyes damn it!”
He snatched his hand away, recoiling at her touch, his eyes burning into the formica surface of the table.
“Todd, you need to level with me. Our sex life is non-existent, you snap at the kids, and even when you’re home, you’re miles away. Tell me, is our marriage over?
Todd lifted his eyes to face those green pools of scrutiny. “Yes Mia, I’m afraid it is.”
“So you’re leaving me for Alex?”
“Mia, I’m so sorry, but there’s something you need to know. I’m not leaving you for another woman, Alex is a man and we are in love.
© Copyright 2020 Sue Harris. All rights reserved.
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Nice one Suzie -
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Thank you Darius, it was a total shock but a great one!
I totally didn't see that coming.....I LOVE IT
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Thank you Heather! Your comment is greatly appreciated.
OH MAH God. That was so good. ~Makes an applause~
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Thanks for your comment, much appreciated. Pleased you enjoyed it.
Hahaha, nice plot twist! I'm amazed that you were able to capture so many emotions and reveal so much about the characters in such a short piece. This was great!
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Thanks for your comments. I was actually amazed I won it, but so thrilled. I'd forgotten I had submitted a story until I had the email telling me I'd won first prize!
Oh this is excellent ending! Wow. I love it. And I love your dialogues.
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Thanks JB, couldn't believe I actually won it!
Well, there wasn't much she could say to that,was there! Don't know how I missed this, Sue. Excellent!
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Thank you Hully. High praise indeed, am chuffed.
This had really great descriptive imagery for a small fiction piece. The emotion was also very well portrayed with the ending being a good twist. Nicely done!
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Thank you very much, Ryan. Your comment is very much appreciated.
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