DREAMY EYES

Poem by: sungemini15

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EYES.....

Taking one look into your dreamy eyes,

I see what others cant...

Your thoughts are alost,

Your eyes tell it all...

I look deep into your eyes to hear what you dont tell me...

I see you for who you are...

Someone so different from everyone else...

I wait for your touch,

For your embrace,

For your breath on my neck,

For you to look into my eyes,

so i can see my life with you.

when i take a look into your dreamy eyes...

Submitted: November 22, 2008

Romance love feelings eyes

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SillySushii

ooh, very nice.

it's deep but in simple words.

i liked it!

-ss*

Sat, November 22nd, 2008 11:42pm

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thanks... im glad you like it...

Fri, November 28th, 2008 12:58pm

megan elisabeth

Hey!

As far as your first poem goes, this is good. Something I picked up on though! (just my suggestion lol - if you want to improve!) Stop using the dots at the end of the sentences. I appreciate that it might give the poem a 'dreamy' sort of feeling, but the reader should really be able to tell this from your words! This might be just something I don't like, so sorry if this offends you! Just my opinion lol :D

Mon, November 24th, 2008 6:00pm

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trust me, i dont get offended that fast... i take it as constructive criticism... and i all helps...

Fri, November 28th, 2008 12:57pm