A Dream

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Action and Adventure  |  House: Booksie Classic

This is a random dream I had, that stuck in my mind for a long time. I just wanted to get it out there. I know it's disjounted and silly, but dreams are like that. I've tried to write it as a story, and make it as plausible as possible.

The view takes my breath away, leaving me reeling with shock. It’s unlike anything I’ve ever seen before. If only I could enjoy it without the gnawing fear deep in the pit of my stomach.
We swoop through the air, like a bird. Over endless green fields surrounded by thick, leafy forest.
I fake a scream, clutching the arm of the driver next to me. He is very handsome, with thick curly hair and deep penetrating eyes.
And then I scream for real.
We’re being chased, behind us is what looks like a giant floating eyeball. The iris is a deep green, and I can see through the tinted glass of the pupil a laughing man, the thrill of the chase apparent on his features.
We’re swooping through the clouds, through the mist. I strain my body round, looking for the eyeball again.
It’s gone.
Then I see it, on the desert sand beneath us. The eyeball has landed on the orange sand. “Have they broken down?” I ask fearfully.
We land near them, although my instincts are screaming at me not too. I climb out of the old fashioned fighter pilot plane, and immediately the heat hits me. I can barely move for the sluggish, heavy heat pressing down at me from all directions.
I try to run, but I can’t. My feet won’t move as fast as I won’t them too, like I am trapped in slow motion. As I try to run I pass the eyeball. Inside, are several girls and the man driving. They are laughing at me, in hysterics. They climb out. Immediately I fear for my life, so I run.
I am running, running, running, the heat pressing down on me. Eventually I reach the green again. The sky is getting darker now, and it’s cooler. The leafy green oasis is calling me. I walk towards it.
I can see a herd of camels, walking into the sunset, away from me, casting long shadows. The sight gives me hope.

Submitted: January 16, 2011

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James D. Storrington

You describe your dream very well. Do you think that you might be able to turn it into a story, perhaps? Just a thought...
Keep writing!
~ Ds

Sun, January 16th, 2011 10:41am


thanks for commenting. I might in the future, I don't know yet!x

Sun, January 16th, 2011 2:45am


It sounds amazing. Especially how well you remembered it and can describe it in so much deatil. You should definately keep writing. =) and thanks for reading a long, dark, narrow path. i put much thought into it. =)

Sun, January 16th, 2011 7:02pm


thank you for reading, i wrote it down after I had the dream lol so that's how I remembered it.

Mon, January 17th, 2011 12:58am


HAHAHA! I'm sorry but this story CRACKED ME UP! Dreams are very starnge I know, and it's actually pretty cool to hear about others. You must have very active mind! I for one loved it!-Ariel

Mon, January 17th, 2011 2:39am


lol thanks for reading and commenting!:)

Mon, January 17th, 2011 1:00am



Interesting, suspenseful, mysterious, imaginative, eerie and well written. Captures the mysterious essence of a dream. Enjoyed reading it.

Gave it an "I Like It" vote. As with all chapters of your other posting. Both entertaining and well deserved.

Presentation Issues:

1. Skip a line between intended paragraphs.

2. Start a new paragraph each time a character may speak, in quotes "", in his/her turn.

This will make your postings more inviting to other readers. Hope this helps.

Thank you for becoming a fan. Appreciative and grateful. You are most kind, thoughtful and considerate.

Happy 2011,

Ed Bradley.

Sat, January 22nd, 2011 7:51pm


thank you so much, i will try to include your suggestions for improvements in my writing. thank you for commenting and liking!

Sat, January 22nd, 2011 7:46pm


Haha that was funny. It's really nice listening to other people's dreams. I wrote my weirdest dream in one entry of my journal
(http://www.booksie.com/non-fiction/novel/smileyfication/smileyfications-life/chapter/25 and it begins with "I really should've said this earlier" It's a really messed up dream)
Haha floating eyeball. That's pretty cool =) Haha I just read my journal and remembered a dream that I'd forgotten before.

Fri, February 18th, 2011 3:11am


lol! I'll read your dream ;D x

Fri, February 18th, 2011 1:02am


Good job! :) keep writing. very good story.

Fri, February 18th, 2011 10:48am


thank you :)

Fri, February 18th, 2011 3:42am


Amazing job! I liked reading it =3

Sat, February 19th, 2011 10:47am


Thank you :)

Sat, February 19th, 2011 4:01am


good job!!

Thu, February 24th, 2011 3:33pm


thank you (:

Thu, February 24th, 2011 6:44pm


Very mysterious and nicely penned. Think about revising. It would make a good novel. Lots of possibilities here. :)

Mon, February 28th, 2011 8:17pm


thank you and i will take that into consideration :)

Tue, March 1st, 2011 12:47am

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