Autumns magic

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

something I wish everyone could experience.

Autumns magic

The autumns breeze at noon,
calls me to soon, as a child I am called to,
into the forest of rustling trees,
a colorful paradise, in a world a kingdom not my own,
as I sit upon a moss covered log, I look into the blue sky and sigh,
"Dear friend, oh! dear friend!" a voice calls,
out of the trees fly's a blue winged faerie,
"Hello! hello! good to see you again" I say,
with a bright smile I get up and run too,
"tis true 'tis true a great time to see you!" the faerie said,
"almost the solstice, are the people readying the parade?" I gleam,
the faerie nodded happily,
"Naveya! Naveya! come quickly to see our part!" said a green blur which hit Naveya with a thud,
"sweet cherries! riylin!" Naveya said hugging the younger faerie,
"tis a beautiful day I say!" said riylin as she hugged Naveya and tugged at her wings playfully,
as a song rang out,
"tis be the day we await,
for coming snow of blooming weather,
thy grace is blown as lies in wind,
come and see I say,
come and breathe within thy realm,
come oh come and see I plea",
the wind sang softly of the fest to come,
air within wind became still ,
as the realm appeared to open eyes,
"tis begun! the fest has begun!" riylin said happily,
"I see I see let the fest begin! voices say by wind.
by- talented dreams:)


Submitted: January 24, 2013

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Haineko14

I enjoyed reading this. It reminds me of what I used to think when I was younger and in the middle of the forest where I live. Plus I just love anything that has fantasy. You're a talented writer! :D

Thu, January 24th, 2013 10:09am

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heh thanks again I like your writing also :)

Thu, January 24th, 2013 4:17pm

Bert Broomberg

Nice piece of writing, but I think I can offer you some friendly advice. Somehow I think that this should not really be called a poem, because it reads more like a piece of well written prose. Just chopping up the lines doesn't make it poetry. I think that with a bit of extra work this could be turned into a very nice short story, or by altering some of the lines, it could be turned into a more convincing piece of poetry. This comment is not meant to hurt your feelings; as a matter of fact, I liked the writing, but it is just a comment to help you become an even better writer. Keep up the good work.

Thu, January 24th, 2013 9:47pm

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yea thank u I was thinking about making it a short story I guess ill work on it! thanks again! :)

Thu, January 24th, 2013 4:15pm

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