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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

Have you ever felt hopeless when they tell you "persevere"? And that whatever you do, the end is near?

I challenge but my limits

Every single day

I listen to but myself, though,

Never to what I say.


Therel's no difference between forfeit

And wanting to slay,

The spirit inside of me that

Charred a hole in my way.


Keep these feelings smothered

They simply need to stay.

No need to tell the world,

And a waste to sit and pray.


Because when I burn

Oh, I want to pull away

And these scorch marks

Are the price I, consequently, pay.


A long fight this has become,

Left nothing to bay,

But a pile of ashes

Where my still beating heart lay.



Submitted: August 07, 2015

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H. Adams

Gorgeous poem. Pretty relatable for people having the same problem. I like the rhyming job you did here and the flow was great as usual. Awesome work!

Sat, August 8th, 2015 4:11am


Thank you!

Sat, August 8th, 2015 6:38am

Melancholic Wisdom

I can relate to this poem a lot. I like the rhyming and it flows really well. I liked it. You're really talented. Keep up the good work!

Sat, August 29th, 2015 12:42am


Thank you. Glad that you could relate!

Fri, August 28th, 2015 5:50pm


Writing about and describing emotions is the driving force behind most poetry, and the precision of language will always be at odds with the intangibility of feelings. Hence the use of rhythm and pace, as well as words, combine to get the emotions across. You have a great sense of pace, but you should experiment with more free verse instead of always rhyming. I think you would find the freedom liberating and enlightening. I am going to enjoy watching you evolve as a writer!

Sun, August 30th, 2015 2:45pm


True. I feel quite comfortable with rhyming poems, in fact, I'm prompted to rhyme everything nowadays. I don't feels nice? Definitely going to try some more free verse soon. Thank you for such nice words, and I hope I won't dissappoint :)

Sun, August 30th, 2015 8:30am

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