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Darkest remembrance.
In array of earthshattering ego.
storm the gates of me.


Submitted: June 10, 2010

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munkiC munkiDU

I don't know much about Haiku but this sounds good! :)(and aren't you supposed to you mention nature somewhere??) ^.^
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Fri, June 11th, 2010 4:11am

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storm,earth, but i dont think so.most haiku talk about nature but thay usally mean something else like a feeling.time something like that. thank u for your comment.

Fri, June 11th, 2010 4:09am

Azaleas secrets

Heavily loaded with a deep thought ... hmmm.

Fri, June 11th, 2010 8:17am

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yes a short poem like this u cant just say every thing only 17 syllable. always will leave deep thought. thank u for your comment.ps thank you

Fri, June 11th, 2010 4:16am

FlawedByDesign

This is beautiful and thought provoking, but I'm counting 20 syllables and I definitely can't read it in one breath :P

Fri, June 11th, 2010 4:46pm

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you are right, on the syllabes but i didnt count all the syllabes in earthshatering, i did not really follow the rules of a haiku, and i know this but i care more about the over all sound and flow than folling the rules. but i do thank u for your comment.

Fri, June 11th, 2010 10:06am

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