Darkness stays

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

this is a longer poem of mine. i used alot of alliteration & assonance. Thats just how it came into my head i suppose. i got told off in highschool for using commas & semi-colons inappropriately, but i tried to use them in this to imply the meter & rhythm of the verses. kinda failed miserably, & the beat is only in my head. its very stop startery.

Nestled among shaded covers torn & drear
Below veil of Neverlight,
Heightened hither from
Forlorn feebling facade of flower's freedom,

Disinclined to bloom upon mornings rouse ever after.
Its absence wrought such despise of ignorance,
yet tolerance in perceiverance.

Brightened by brotherhood & beauty,
Thus Neverlight forced abhorrent ultimatums onto failing supports.

Telling tales too tiring to transpose into tentative talk;
Sealing feats of epic into inclined ignorance
Indicative of potential;
Circumstantial & sequential.

The Neverlight's brazen; emblazoned on havens,
This darkness holds reason for both craven & vixen.

To its blind ambition thus dark holds thee, exonerates;
When taken;
no battle,

2 sides release only;
Thou sun needs thy torch,
& so darkness, it's equal;
It's midnight; it's blacked out;
It's cover; it's sequal.

Shone on, did thy bleak Neverlight;
Who's disposition, never bright,
Drear & bleak, & dull & deep;
Unopposed by those who sleep,
Tear down the veil & light the street;
Weep silently for sun to creep.

Submitted: June 22, 2008

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It's very imaginative.
The selection of words were perfect fit to the poem. You have a great imagination too. =]

Sat, June 28th, 2008 10:15pm


lol, thankyou. =)

Sat, June 28th, 2008 4:46pm

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