The thing I love most...............

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Romance  |  House: Booksie Classic

Haven't posted anything new in awhile. Here's something to refresh my creative flow hahaha

The Thing I Love Most by Kassidy VanGundy

What's the one thing that makes me weak

and numbs my tounge so I can't speak?

It really makes my knees shake

like an uncontrolable earthquake!

All the excitement makes my nerves go crazy,

And then my mind goes hazy...

My heart just stops,

and my worlds spinnin' round like the fastest tops!

Finally my body  seems to completely melt

and soars higher to the heavens! to the cyper belt!!

Even with all of this going on, I still think of you.

I see your face, feel your touch, and love the things you do.

So what is this amazing thing that sends me amiss?

Jared darling, it's your kiss!


Submitted: September 03, 2009

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miss woodstock

wow, Kassidy VanGundy. That name is kick ass too. This poem is adorable and gorgeous and I wish I had someone to feel this about

Sun, September 6th, 2009 4:32am

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haha thanks that's my real name. Again thanks for commenting Miss Woodstock. I love hearing feedback from critics. I'm really glad you liked this poem and yes I think I am the luckiest girl on this good, green Earth

Mon, September 7th, 2009 2:28pm

AryaAliceLuna

That was cute!

Tue, September 8th, 2009 5:59pm

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thanks so much for the comment! :D

Tue, September 8th, 2009 3:57pm

forevamore123

Hhahaha that was SO cute!!! I read your comment on my page, and I assume this is the poem you were talking about. It's really cute!!! I love how it's kinda childish and playful at the beginning, and then it's all, "I still love, darling!" at the end. It's a cutie!!!

I felt ironic at the very end when you said "Jared, darling, it's your kiss!" only because you said in your comment on my page that you would read Prince Jared. And so it was kind of stuck in my head while I read this poem. And then it was like BOOM. And you said Jared. Yea, I felt ironic. Weird.

But this poem's a REAL cutie!! I can't wait to read some more new stuff!!!

Much love,
forevamore123

Sun, September 13th, 2009 5:24pm

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awww thank you so much and yeah I thought it was a bit ironic after I found out about your peice too. Thank you so much for the praise! hahahaha Well I tried to make it cute and child like because that's how "we" are. haha glad I accomplished that thanks

Mon, September 14th, 2009 7:09pm

Zoeyy

aw this is so cute! i love it :] "jared darling" jared is one of my favorite names too! haha very good!

Sun, September 13th, 2009 8:18pm

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haha thanks for commenting! :D

Mon, September 14th, 2009 7:11pm

RandomlyDraco

Wow. Thats amazing. :D

Tue, September 15th, 2009 2:36am

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thank you!

Mon, September 14th, 2009 7:40pm

dynamic12

Thanks for appreciating my effort. I read your nice comments on my page and I dropped by yours.

This poem is really nice and well-written. You expressed your feelings in the poem very well. I wonder, how easy it becomes to write poem and express it artistically when one strongly feels about something. Its like words flow automatically without you recognizing it.

Fri, September 18th, 2009 3:23am

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Thank you so much for the comments. I completely understand what you're saying about words just flowing out when you strongly believe in something. This is what I experience all the time and I feel blessed with it. I wish you the same luck in your writing. thanks again for the comments

Sat, September 19th, 2009 7:53am

sparkle12345

Aw I like this, I don't usually like poems that ryhme but this works very well!

Sat, September 19th, 2009 3:17pm

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haha thanks :D

Sat, September 19th, 2009 2:20pm

guitarplayer

Aww, this is so cute! the emotion comes through really well!
x

Sat, October 3rd, 2009 9:11am

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Thank you for reading. I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Sat, October 3rd, 2009 1:01pm

summerlover

This is so sweet, free, and real. I liked it!
Less intimate than your other one about your boyfriend, yet still loving and sends out the same message.
Go0o0o0od work!

Sat, October 10th, 2009 11:44pm

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hahaha thanks a lot. That's a very interesting point. That's what I was going for and I'm really happy you said that! Thanks for reading!

Sat, October 10th, 2009 4:49pm

Mistress of Word Play

A very well put together poem. Love the words and the way you used them. Great rhythm and flow. Love it! Susan :)

Thu, November 12th, 2009 4:13am

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Thank you so much for the read! I'm happy you enjoyed it.

Sat, November 14th, 2009 10:33am

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