Can't Live without you
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Poem by: The story that dont have a end
Can't live without you,how do I make my heart understand it
Can't escape from loneliness,finding you away from me everytime.(2 Times)
In each way i find you ,you became destination of my each journey.
Want to forget you,but for this too i had to remember you.
When I think of you,it leaves tears in my eyes.
My day begins with you,My day ends with you.
Can't live without you,how do I make my heart understand it
Can't escape from loneliness,finding you away from me everytime.(1 Time)
You are not with me ,then why there is a feeling of being you around me.
when you got away from me,i realized that i was living for you.
when i saw you for the first time,my heart fell in love with you.
At that moment I never thought,my heart could be broken.
Can't live without you,how do I make my heart understand it
Can't escape from loneliness,finding you away from me everytime.
I am feeling compassionate for getting a glance of you,even I forgot to breath without you.
Every happiness is strange for me,I made pain my friend.
Now I am running away from myself,Now I am searching you everywhere.
I can't fight with myself anymore,I can't live without you anymore.
Can't live without you,how do I make my heart understand it,
Can't escape from loneliness,finding you away from me everytime.(2 Times)
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love this poem it truly strikes heart
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wooo hooo, good job!! :)
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I can picture this as a slow pop song. It has a romantic and melancholy feel.
You did an aweome job!
Thanks for the invite. Hope to connect with you soon.
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Thanks Lisa
I would really love to hear this as a song now. I really enjoyed reading this.
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Thanks Criss
Melancholic and lovely good work!
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Thanks ashi17
This is great. I love poems like this but I found myself humming it lol
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Thanks sneeding.
Great job with this one, Well written.
JB
Poetry Embrace
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Thanks JBrewer.
Very well done. I enjoyed this. It was rather simply worded, but painted a picture more vivid than most I've ever read. Excellent:)
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Thanks Entity
This one is just as good (if not better) than the other one you wrote. In my opinion, this should make that person feel special. This is absolutely wonderful, Kudos once again :)
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Thanks Teddy
It's a great little song and I like it, although I find it a bit too sweet for me (personal preference). Well written though :)
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Thanks. Rowenya
Aww. I like this :) Really well written! Good job!
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Thanks domi823.
very nice.. Keep it up okay.. Writing something is the best way to express yourself, your feelings and thoughts.. Soo i like your work,, and good job! :)
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Thanks Bella
Inspirational and moving, beautiful work : )
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Thanks synesthesia.
Really beautiful. Moving and heartwarming. If you can attach and audio for this song, it would help me picture the flow a bit more :)
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Thanks Valeria.I would come up thi audio soon .
This is really good. I did notice a few grammatical and spelling mistakes. For example, you said "You are not with me, then why there is a feeling of being you around me" and I'm pretty sure you meant to say "you are not with me, then why is there a feeling of you being around me"
There were simple spelling mistakes as well, but to the point that I couldn't understand the point.
Good job (:
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Thanks for the comment.I am not that good with my grammer but thanks for pointing it out.It will help me to improve.
This is beautiful... *Heart fluttering in chest*
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Thanks Zopyros
This is really sweet! There were a few spelling/ grammar mistakes, but they can easily be fixed. I found the description really sweet, your "first and last love." Im not a romantic person generally, but it's cute. I could imagine it as a song :)
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Thanks smircle...
It's really touching. I wish the last love interest I had felt this way about me...
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thanks Coyote
awww very nice sad poem.
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thanks hafsa91
nice mann!! it's beautiful :)
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