This is What I Would Like

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

Ok, for this particular piece you have to read this little summary.

(slightly different theme! woohoo!)

1. Boy is going away.
2. He asked if anyone would like for him to get them something while he was gone
3. This is what I would like

Bring me back the man you used to be
The one who liked me for what I used to be
Bring me back the man you once were
Where your words meant something, where they didn’t hurt.
Bring me back the man I know you are
The one who made me feel like a shining star.
Bring me back the man I used to love
The one who gave me compliments “just ‘cuz.”
Bring me back the girl I used to be
The one who was honest and open and free.
Bring me back the girl I once was
The one who was open to love.
Bring me back the girl I know I am
The one who was as innocent as the smallest of lambs.
Bring me back the girl I used to know
The one who wasn’t destroyed by your verbal blows.
Bring back the “us” and the “we”
Didn’t we used to mean something?
Bring back the “couple” and the “pair”
All the togetherness we used to share.
Bring back the “duo” and the “two”
Remember the fun things we planned to do?
Bring back the “I want you” and the hope of “I love you”
A hope now destroyed, but still may be true.


Submitted: June 19, 2008

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lemonluv

liz!omg! is this your form of getting over bob? geez. never knew he meant that much.................anywho, good job! and you just keep on venting darnit!
~Lemon

Thu, June 19th, 2008 8:46pm

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lol I don't know if he actually did mean that much, but I'm guessing he did. Geez, its kinda freaky when you have no idea what your feelings are

Thu, June 19th, 2008 1:52pm

Those

Does it look like a poem to you guys or just a big paragraph? Please tell me, cus it looks like a paragraph to me, and thats not what i want

Thu, June 19th, 2008 8:59pm

lemonluv

it looks like a paragraph. but ti sounds like a poem.

Thu, June 19th, 2008 10:35pm

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what about now? Urgh! i don't know if its my computer, or the website, but it is irritating me!

Thu, June 19th, 2008 3:38pm

Alice Oiseau

booksie messed up fonts. it does look like a poem to me, its just not broken in stanzas. but its not a paragraph where its fills up the space from margin to margin like the comments do.

anyway.
i really liked this poem. it was a very beautiful read and wow - you're improving with every poem! i loved how it had a realistic feel to it, like it sounded like something that could be pulled from a diary. it just had that personal touch to it which makes it all the better.
loved it!
keep it up :)

Fri, June 20th, 2008 1:52am

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thank you! Im pretty proud of that one

Thu, June 19th, 2008 9:00pm

lemonluv

its in poetic form now.
~Lemon

Fri, June 20th, 2008 4:24am

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finally!

Fri, June 20th, 2008 12:42am

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