The CATAPILLAR SONG

ben hardstaff

Ha ha ha ha ha you make me laugh. This is funny

Sultry Alice

Fun, unique, and campy but cute.

I liked it.

Thanks

Lacy Cornwall

Very cute and funny, Thumblina. I definitely like it.

Lacy Cornwall

Thumblina, do us all a favor and delete that comment from Goodbyebaseball. There's a difference between constructive criticism and just being an evil S.O.B. I have never met a rude person on Booksie... until now.

Ben A Vanguarde

There are a few grammatical mistakes:
In the summary, "Friction" should be "Fiction" and "This IA..." should be "This Is..." and "Catapillara" should be "Catapillar"

"BlingBling Bling" should be "Bling Bling Bling".

This is a carefree and frolicking poem. I don't know what Lady Cornwall is referring to (and I don't care because she is right) but this is a light hearted piece to be enjoyed and not dissected for its metaphysical meanings.

You are to be commended to such an enjoyable story.

kaps

It is all funny and full of life... anybody in sad mood gets cheer up once go thru this poem/song...

hats off to u, dolly..:)

Ben A Vanguarde

With reference to bad comments, Jimmy's Girl Friend received 3 bad comments and 300 good ones. These folks are out there but need not concern you.

Booksie is here for our enjoyment and as a laboratory to improve our writing skills.

You're doing fine.

Maddie Patrick

This is such a lighthearted awesome poem. And yes that Goodbyebaseball is a (I'm not going to say what I'm thinking in my mind) let's say jerk. LOL. HE's been doing that on a lot of people's stuff. Anyway I really enjoyed your poem. It made me smile and it brightened up my day. Good job.

bobthebuilder

A little silliness is good now and then.

Future Author

Dear, thumblina,

Firstly, I would like to thank you for taking apart in my contest! I have been reading the entries for a while now and yours happens to be the 19th that I have read so far.

I don't know how to put this... Though it was cheerful and fun to read, I really didn't understand it. I don't know. I know that one guy with the bad comment is rude to everyone, but to be honest I have to agree with kind of what he said, but not exactly what he said. I don't agree with the omg kill me portion because this is and never will be that bad, but I do have to agree that this felt as if it were written by a child or maybe a firt stim poet. I don't want or mean to be rude, but that is how I felt. But luckily, your poem isn't judged based off what I like, haha, si no worries. But anywho, I am here to help you, not to be totally rude, so I really hope you take it the way I am trying to be! Oh gosh, here I go with my rambling. But tell me, was this perhaps written for a child audience? Because that would make more sense to me. I don't know. That's my input/opinion...

Overall, good job! I gave this my "I LIKED IT" vote because it deserves that much! It was fun, exciting, and inviting! It really was!

I have so many more entries to read and with the way I am judging them, anyone could win! I would like to say that I am not biased, so it really isn't based upon my liking the entries in the end. I had to do something like that, so it would be fair (Ex: # of reads, comments, and likes, etc.) So really, I am not the only judge here. I wish you the best of luck in the compitition!

Also, I can't remember who I have already asked or not, but I have another contest out right now called, "Chapter Link Contest" so you can join and can keep your mind busy on that while I am judging this current contest. Please follow the link given below to read all the details I have given, so you know what to do. You have until Saturday, March 9th, 2013 to enter this contest.

Link: http://www.booksie.com/other/miscellaneous/future_author/chapter-link-contest

I sure hope I said everything I wanted to! I'll let you know when the results are up!
Good luck! :D
~future author

Future Author

The results are finally in for my Poem and Short Story Entries of my "New Year, New Contest" contest! Did you place in the top three of either genre of writing? Follow this link to find out! Link: http://www.booksie.com/other/miscellaneous/future_author/new-year-new-contest-(closed) If you would like to know your scoring on each of the 10 aspects, please ask me and I would be glad to show you what you scored high on, as well as what you scored low on. Please trust me when I say that none of the entries were bad in anyway and that makes more sense when you see your complete score. Goodness, I cannot believe that this contest is finally over! I hope you had so much fun while participating in my contest because I had so much fun while reading your entry(ies) and I hope to see you in my next contest(s)! :DDDDDDD

~future author

Poetlife

ha!ha!ha!ha!ha!ha! Lol. I love it. so fummy and good.
Thanks for sharing.