my love i love you so much

Reads: 1065  | Likes: 0  | Shelves: 0  | Comments: 8

  • Facebook
  • Twitter
  • Reddit
  • Pinterest
  • Invite

Status: Finished  |  Genre: Romance  |  House: Booksie Classic

feelings

I cant talk to u

its not coz iam mad at you

 

I realised that the more i talk to you

i fall in love with you

 

The more i fall in love with you

i realise i miss you

 

The more i misss you

all the more i love you


Submitted: June 20, 2012

© Copyright 2021 thumblina Aka vandana. All rights reserved.

  • Facebook
  • Twitter
  • Reddit
  • Pinterest
  • Invite

Add Your Comments:

Comments

MonaJane

Simple yet very lovely, you have managed to depict true feelings

Wed, June 20th, 2012 10:59am

Author
Reply

thank you

Tue, December 11th, 2012 10:01pm

an0nym0us

well done!! simple and meaningful !
:)

Wed, June 20th, 2012 12:11pm

Author
Reply

thank you

Tue, December 11th, 2012 10:00pm

thumblina Aka vandana

thank you for encouraging me......plz keep reading my work and commenting on it......wud like to open a blog on these says.........these words r from my heart.........with your support will post more quotes...


thank u really appreciate it

Sun, August 5th, 2012 4:52am

kaps

More I try to stay away frm U..
the more I feel attracted towards U...

More I feel attracted towards U..
the more I feel impossible to stay away frm U...:):)

Fri, January 4th, 2013 2:28am

Author
Reply

Thanks for commenting and thank you for continuing the poem....

It actually added more feelings to the poem.....

Thu, January 3rd, 2013 6:34pm

Aparna Gopan

Lovely and simple poem Thumblina.
A little line for you.
'The more I read your works
The more I like you
The more I think of poems
The more comes Thumblina to my mind'

LOL..take it as a lil poem dedicated to you:)

Thu, May 29th, 2014 12:56pm

Author
Reply

awww thank you so very much...

Thu, May 29th, 2014 8:29am

James William Cooper

What a lovely piece thumblina! What I really like, is the picture that you've included along with your work. It's a really fitting image and I love the way the boy and the girl are stretching over the world to embrace each other. To me, it portrays the idea that love is universal and no matter where two lovers are in the world, they are always connected and that nothing can ever come between a love shared between them... Such a powerful and uniting image there thumblina.

The way you begin your piece by saying 'I can't talk to u. It's not coz I'm mad at you, I realized that the more I talk to you, I fall in love with you,' is great because it conveys your love for this person and how even talking to them, you begin to fall in love with them. I love the repetition of 'you' because it shows just how much you really love this person, how you have immense feelings for them and the repeated use of 'you' just helps to make your piece so much more effective and allows your feelings to be conveyed in such a clear way.

I also like the 'steps' if you like after each stanza, for example 'The more I talk to you, I fall in love with you. The more I fall in love with you, I realize I miss you. The more I miss you, all the more I love you.' Wow! What a beautiful piece indeed thumblina! You've done an excellent job with this and you should be extremely proud of yourself and your efforts. Such a loving and heart-felt piece, which clearly conveys your feelings of love for this person. Well done thumblina, keep up the great work! :) Take great care and have a lovely day. :)

Fri, February 19th, 2016 8:33pm

Author
Reply

Thank you

Sun, February 12th, 2017 6:45am

Stormbird Throneshaker

Short, simple and to the point of getting the point to the heart. A lot of truth in it as well. Great job.

Thu, March 31st, 2016 12:10am

Stormbird Throneshaker

Short, simple and to the point of getting the point to the heart. A lot of truth in it as well. Great job.

Thu, March 31st, 2016 12:10am

More Romance Poems