So dark.
Waves are crashing down, a sunny day
Shines brightly from above,
Sadness. Falling down, down, down
In timeless rhythms, a single tear is born
Listen to the bottomless cries of---gone.
I blinked.
Running to an endless road,
A crimson rose, petal of thorns,
Darkness to the right
With candle lights singing faintly
To death’s hymn and you---gone.
My heart skipped a beat.
An almost kiss scene, hated.
Shivering in the cold, the fire sleeps within
My eyes blur slightly and laughter closed
My arms around---gone.
A cry.
Familiar bizarreness below me,
Amber shades of grayellowhitemerald;
A forest, a whale, a vampire, a song
All coming to save the heroine… fading.
Open your eyes.
Submitted: April 20, 2008
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The poem is very well described ,that it helps create a mental image. I agree with the poem. Dreams has lots of meaning and you never dream the same dream twice... Does this makes sense to you? I could relate to this poem easily. Good work.
Thu, April 24th, 2008 1:55am
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thank you =) & yes it makes sense to me. glad that you could relate to it!!
Wed, April 23rd, 2008 6:58pm
Oh yes! Captured me from beginning to end!! Loved it. Loved it.
In timeless rhythms, a single tear is born
liked that bit specially and your ending!!
Fabulous job
:) Eternal Night.
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Domo arigatou gozaimasu! lol this poem is really special to me.. so i'm really happy you loved it =) thanks!!
Tue, April 29th, 2008 1:33pm
I loved the way u define every little single detail, in a rythematic fashion. This poem speaks for itself, Wonderful :)
Tue, April 29th, 2008 9:00pm
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thank you so much for the wonderful comment!! i appreciate it =)
Tue, April 29th, 2008 2:02pm
I like this peice alot! This is a very beautiful peice.
Wed, April 30th, 2008 4:12pm
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thank you so much!! =)
Wed, April 30th, 2008 9:36am
very nice piece i liked it. =]]
Fri, June 20th, 2008 10:25pm
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thank you so much!! =)
Fri, June 20th, 2008 3:25pm
without dreams, there are no inspirations:) great poem, cool imagery
Sun, July 13th, 2008 3:04am
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exactly right, indiefreak. thank you for reading! =)
Mon, July 14th, 2008 10:27amFacebook Comments
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Loved the imagery and feel of this one. The structure and flow were also great, keep writing.
Sun, April 20th, 2008 11:42pmAuthor
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i appreciate your comments =) thanks again for reading!!
Sun, April 20th, 2008 7:18pm