the ever changing world of our minds...

So dark.

Waves are crashing down, a sunny day
Shines brightly from above,
Sadness. Falling down, down, down
In timeless rhythms, a single tear is born
Listen to the bottomless cries of---gone.

I blinked.

Running to an endless road,
A crimson rose, petal of thorns,
Darkness to the right
With candle lights singing faintly
To death’s hymn and you---gone.

My heart skipped a beat.

An almost kiss scene, hated.
Shivering in the cold, the fire sleeps within
My eyes blur slightly and laughter closed
My arms around---gone.

A cry.

Familiar bizarreness below me,
Amber shades of grayellowhitemerald;
A forest, a whale, a vampire, a song
All coming to save the heroine… fading.

Open your eyes.

Submitted: April 20, 2008

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Loved the imagery and feel of this one. The structure and flow were also great, keep writing.

Sun, April 20th, 2008 11:42pm


i appreciate your comments =) thanks again for reading!!

Sun, April 20th, 2008 7:18pm


The poem is very well described ,that it helps create a mental image. I agree with the poem. Dreams has lots of meaning and you never dream the same dream twice... Does this makes sense to you? I could relate to this poem easily. Good work.

Thu, April 24th, 2008 1:55am


thank you =) & yes it makes sense to me. glad that you could relate to it!!

Wed, April 23rd, 2008 6:58pm

Eternal Night

Oh yes! Captured me from beginning to end!! Loved it. Loved it.

In timeless rhythms, a single tear is born

liked that bit specially and your ending!!
Fabulous job

:) Eternal Night.

Tue, April 29th, 2008 9:50am


Domo arigatou gozaimasu! lol this poem is really special to me.. so i'm really happy you loved it =) thanks!!

Tue, April 29th, 2008 1:33pm


I loved the way u define every little single detail, in a rythematic fashion. This poem speaks for itself, Wonderful :)

Tue, April 29th, 2008 9:00pm


thank you so much for the wonderful comment!! i appreciate it =)

Tue, April 29th, 2008 2:02pm


I like this peice alot! This is a very beautiful peice.

Wed, April 30th, 2008 4:12pm


thank you so much!! =)

Wed, April 30th, 2008 9:36am


very nice piece i liked it. =]]

Fri, June 20th, 2008 10:25pm


thank you so much!! =)

Fri, June 20th, 2008 3:25pm


without dreams, there are no inspirations:) great poem, cool imagery

Sun, July 13th, 2008 3:04am


exactly right, indiefreak. thank you for reading! =)

Mon, July 14th, 2008 10:27am

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