A fight

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: True Confessions  |  House: Booksie Classic

This is just a flow of my true feelings......

I knew something was wrong

There was mixed feelings of emotions which were really strong

 

The day had begun in wrong way

I sat with you in breakfast in an argument so to say

 

Then I sped off to my class

Wishing there was more time which could keep us apart

 

I came home to find you complain to your mom about me

I tried to persuade you to let the be silent as it could be

 

But you did not listen to me and we fought

All the love between was just lost

 

We were both reduced to tears

And confirmed were my worst fears

 

That the day had come when we would just hate each other

And even forget that we were sisters

 

You left the house in fit of anger

And I shut the door loudly

 

Today I cannot bear even your name

I know this is really lame

 

I could not sleep well that night

And will forever remember that fight

 

 


Submitted: June 13, 2011

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BrittanyJacksonPaz

I hope you two can resolve your conflict.

Mon, June 13th, 2011 6:12pm

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yeah I hope so I can get over it,but thnx for commenting

Mon, June 13th, 2011 9:52pm

arun

Very sad. I've no sis or bro, I'm the only son, but though, I can imagine how hard it will be to fight off one's sibling...

The rhymes were your positives. The melancholy tone of the poem is actually enjoyable... I really liked it - as a reviewer.

I feel sorry for you - as a reader/friend. I hope you've had a reunion?

Kmu. Good writ.

Mon, June 27th, 2011 6:59pm

Khano

You've a strong mix of emotions which you channeled well. :)

Thu, July 14th, 2011 10:07pm

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Thankyou,I have written this in a fit of anger actually>_< but ty anyway to read it.tc

Fri, July 15th, 2011 12:36am

Zin Dar

Good job.
I noticed the perfect rhyme to begin with, but as the anger is expressed on its worst, it breaks up. It may or may not be concious on your part, but it gives intensity to that situation. The last two stanzas end with rhyme, calm and relative control as you look back to it.
Good work ^^

Tue, July 19th, 2011 10:10am

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Thanks a lot :)

Sat, August 13th, 2011 9:44pm

SilentbutDeadly

WOW!! Okay just a quick one then since you don’t feel comfortable with it. I really understand what you mean been there ages ago hehe Great yet again you rhyming is just great why didn’t Arun tell me about you before or the others crazy people ;0. Fabulous

Live,Laugh,love

Asiya xx

Mon, August 29th, 2011 10:42am

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