Why Must This Mountain Be So Far Away

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

Life, maybe. For some, possibly.

Why must the mountain be so far away?

For the running of steeds cannot come into play.

One mile is over, yet another proceeds.

I can't think of the reason I'd do these good deeds.

The sun shines through droughts, the moon through the snow,

There are things in this place that I'd rather not know.

Like an infinite labyrinth this place has become,

From the darkest imaginaton these beasts can't be from.

If time is an illution, should I just turn back,

Or will this, too, last forever, will an end this place lack?

I feel so damn lost, and I haven't a map.

I can hear nearly nothing, but that of a tap.

I know of the pain, but I just cannot feel,

For the things I so fear are exceptionally real.

The grey clouds are coming, and I'm afraid this is a storm.

I just need someone here right now to make my soul feel warm.

I can't remember sunshine, and I can't forget the moon,

The only thing my mind can hear is this lovely tune.

And as I sing this lovely tune, I hear the steps behind me,

The thing I fear the completely most is finally coming blindly.

I start to sprint my way without looking back in fear,

I turn the corner, face the beast, right there, it is a mirror.

There is nothing here at all to keep this beast at bay,

Oh, why must the mountain be so far away?


Submitted: November 07, 2012

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Coralie

This is really good, really blatant about the topic of the poem. But I like it. I just kind of wish (and believe me, it's rare for me to like the usual formalities of things!) that it was in the basic stanza form of poems. To me, it almost felt like an autobiographical paragraph in a novel rather than a poem. OH! And I love your user name. Doctor Who fan, I'm guessing? :)

Wed, November 7th, 2012 3:08am

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Why, yes, I am quite the Doctor Who fan. :) And yeah, I had some speculation, myself on whether I should put the poem into traditional, basic stanza form, but I wasn't sure. It was kind of about past experiences, though. As others most definitely have different ways of seeing the poem ( which I am open to and promote having), I wrote it to symbolize my labyrinth of a life, and disastrous or hard " milestones" or "creatures", if you will, that pass by, but that the creatures eventually won't matter if you face the actual fear: Yourself/Myself. Thanks for the feedback. Negative or positive, I look forward to seeing anything. :) I'll take a look at your stuff, too. Thanks. :)

Tue, November 6th, 2012 8:31pm

annalisepugno

I loved that, captivated me from the get-go. You created really vivid images with the simplest of words. Great job!

Wed, November 7th, 2012 6:55am

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Wow, thank you. :) I am quite the ammeter, of course, but thanks for the impute. It is good to know what to keep doing and what to stop. Thanks, I'll check out your stuff. ;)

Wed, November 7th, 2012 4:22am

Luchri15

This is great...loved it! Keep at it!

Thu, December 6th, 2012 7:58pm

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Thank you! I appreciate the feedback. :)

Thu, December 6th, 2012 2:16pm

SavvyApple

i absolutely love the flow of this poem, as well as the message. i too wonder about the things said, and im like dude the heck what is up with life and all that chiz. but like seriously, you did a great job. nice talent shown. :D

Tue, December 18th, 2012 12:26am

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Thank you. Life, words, perspective, everyting is so strange. I only hope that I can be joined in this labyrunth of life, and this poem is some of my ways of sharing. :)

Mon, December 17th, 2012 5:21pm

Liam Strong

Wow, I don't recall if I've said I have a favourite of yours, but this may just be the one! Geez oh Petes (whoever that is), I loved this poem! It reflects my own writing and a lot of my concepts, for how complex you made this; I thought I really was reading my own writing! My dear, you have eloquence! And that is one of the best things a writer can have, and eloquence comes from the heart, and you've a truly beautiful one! Fabulous poetry! Thank you for sharing, Shai!

Sat, January 18th, 2014 1:11am

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Thank you! This was one of the first poems I actually meant. I remember thinking about everything I was going through, and I didn't know how to explain it. This poem is what got me started.

Fri, January 17th, 2014 11:46pm

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