A Drop of Pain

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another dark writing. For those whom understand the art of suffering.

a prick of the finger
a drop of blood
i am alive
the intense swell of fear explodes
the urge of screaming is near
the pain of torment is here
sound goes silent
sight turns night
touch becomes pain
it is contagious
it is real
in the air
on the ground
in the water
within my breath
the feeling of control vanishes
the thought of comfort has dissipated
the reassurance of life is dwindled
fetal is now how i lay
unprotected and naked
shrouded by this fear
by this life uncontrolled
the thoughts of sanity
the remembrance of love
the embrace of life
the security of control
are faded images
faded lusts
yearned fortunes
a prick of the finger
a drop of blood
i am still alive

me
Twisted Illusions
copyright 11/17/2007

Submitted: February 09, 2008

Poetry dark pain rage writings

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Classy Peach

The art of suffering. pass the torch. only thing is you forgot the part where a tear usually blurs your vision and takes away the clear sight of what you do not want to see. Wonderfully done. Bravo.

Sat, February 9th, 2008 9:19pm

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Thank you classy peach, my only problem is i see more with emotion then my eyes, so even if my vision is blurred the pain stil lingers. Thank you once again

Sat, February 9th, 2008 3:38pm

XBrokenHeartedX

Really liked it. You're one of the people who write poems that I can actually understand. Watch your spelling and capitalization though. Otherwise I think your a terrific writer:) Great job.
XxxxxBrokenxxxxX

Sat, February 9th, 2008 10:57pm

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Thannks again Broken! yeah i know my speeling, grammer and punctuations are always off. but thats kinda just how i am i write it when i feel it and usually leave it just the way it is. Thanks again

Sat, February 9th, 2008 3:41pm

BrokenSilences

this is amazing....do u understand how much you could do with this writing talent? you're going to go somewhere with these...definately.

Sun, February 10th, 2008 1:48am

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Thank you once again! I hope to one day write a book or something i just got to build myself up a bit! thank you!

Sat, February 9th, 2008 6:20pm

dancingsunward

Okay, now I've been reading all your stuff after one caught my eye. And I've "liked" it. Loved it really. But I wasn't commenting. Now I am. These are so beautiful. I really do believe that you could go far. Your style is particular to you and I like it just the way it is. Just, perfection. With a little edit you will be up there. Keep it up, as well as your chin. Beautiful.

Sun, July 21st, 2013 1:36am