The End!

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

My perfect fantsy...was just an illusion...!


Further
into the realm of sorrows
dwells my soul,
deep into the rivers of pain.
Caught up
in a dense oasis
and comes
like a swift wind of sand
bearing with it
tidings
unhappy and sorrowful.
Knocks on my door
a petal, soft
but
catches fire, and hatred
leaving ashes.
My hands uncontrolled
dig a grave for myself;
Empty, shallow
and soaked with rain.
Alone, I lay,
cold, trembling
waiting for death
with broken trust
and nothing to look back to.


Submitted: August 13, 2010

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Christian Taylor

Excellent work! Really good use of words and good flow! Excellent job!

Mon, August 16th, 2010 6:46pm

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Thank you so much! :)

Mon, August 16th, 2010 9:10pm

readerwriter10159

Really good, I like

"Alone, I lay,
cold, trembling
waiting for death
with broken trust
and nothing to look back to."

I love how you wrote it, the words you used. I could really see someone just lying there, really good!

Thu, August 19th, 2010 6:51pm

Author
Reply

Thanks so much :)

Thu, August 19th, 2010 5:24pm

BelindaJolley

I like this. Alot. the flow is nice. although it is a sad peom.. it seems to me thats the only way I can write poetry is from saddness. I like this alot. keep writing!

Sat, August 21st, 2010 7:16am

Author
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Yea, me too. I think sadness inspires me. I don't know. But thank you :)

Sat, August 21st, 2010 12:21am

Elegy

HATS OFF

Fri, September 3rd, 2010 1:37am

Author
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Thank you, thank you, thank you :)

Fri, September 3rd, 2010 12:20am

Venessa Jinson

I liked it. I thought it was really good.

Fri, September 17th, 2010 12:42pm

Author
Reply

Thank you :)

Fri, September 17th, 2010 6:11am

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