Colin Raye
Submitted: November 20, 2009
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So sad but brilliantly written. Love the color so pretty and you formatted the piece as well. Nice job. Susan :)
Sun, November 29th, 2009 9:04pmWow, this is written with alot of emotion. welldone, i really like it:D
Wed, August 18th, 2010 5:52pmi liked this poem, sometimes the only thing that comes from pain so deep is poetry that is so emotive.
Fri, August 20th, 2010 4:15amI'm sorry this happened.
What a shock to the system.
As if something reached inside and just took more than your breath, but most of your being/the dance behind your eyes..
First thing we want to do sometimes is to die just to be with them.
And your line about visiting you in your dreams; did he?
The last part said the truest thing that is felt both before And after their passing;
"I will know deep in my heart,... In this life, I was loved by you."
~katie
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Thankyou for your concern.
And it very much felt like something reached inside and stole my breath, like I couldnt breath no more.
And yes, he did.
Sometimes that is the last you can feel, is that you were loved by him/her and sometimes that is the only thing that can make you strong, even if its only a bit.
Thankyou for your comment.
This is so sad. I was hoping it was fiction but then re-read and saw it really did happen. Be strong and remember the love you shared, nobody can ever take that away. I hope you find love again as you obviously have lots of love to give. Your poems show you have a very caring heart. Keep writing and take care. God Bless. Pat
Mon, September 6th, 2010 9:31pmDevastated for your loss unbreakablee, I felt all the passion, loss and sadness in your words, written from the heart. Truely beautiful, how lucky he was to have your love in his short life. x
Tue, September 14th, 2010 4:43amthat is so sad ): I had a boyfriend die of cancer, so i know what its like...
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This brought tears to me, the emotions was so deep and real. I have a boyfriend in the army and it scars me whenever I think of something that might happen to him. I feel deeply for you. Best Wishes. Amazing write!
Fri, November 20th, 2009 5:31pmAuthor
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Thankyou so much, Im glad you liked it.
Fri, November 20th, 2009 10:15pmYer I guess you just have to keep strong for the ones you truely love. I wish you and your boyfriend all the best, god bless.
Thankyou again.
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