Circle of Life

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Thrillers  |  House: Booksie Classic

~I have no clue why I've been writing these morbid poems, so I apologize =)~
This is a tale of a boy put into a mental health clinic or asylum, where as he thinks this life is too much.
~~Wait until he sees the next one!! =D

Circle of Life


*~Life is just one damned thing after another~*

-Elbert Hubbard

~*A final finale to the next scene:*~

Unloving irises stare into oblivion,

Voices of those gone scream in agony,
Fingernails shrieking as they croon the misery of their lives,
Upon blackboards, upon blackboards,
Etchings of madness fermenting in my mind.
Prodding my flesh with sharp daggers.
Pulling follicles of hair, one by one, from my scalp.
Stroking my bedridden body.
Tormenting me for forever and forever..
Holy water trickles from my veins,
Easing away the creatures of the damned,
Moistness upon my cheek,
Sharpness on my arm,
Voices swirl around,
As I slump to the padded ground.
Velveteen caressing my earlobe,
Urging me forth,
Toward the patch of light.
It tells softly of wondrous places,
Dreams of no pain, no suffering,
A sanctuary of lush.
Diverge into the light,
Clear your mind,
Till the brightness devours its meal.

~*There, and back again:*~

Eyes reopen to a familiar sight,

A padded room,
Just now with an entity of affright.
Satan himself, gleaming in his glory,
Another kill,
Another trap,
Another rat has taken the cheese.
'Don't fall into the light', they say,
For no one truly knows why.
Though, heed my tale,

If not…

Take part in another round of everlasting hell.

((This was one, complete, poem. I just divided it to show you the journey, from one world to the next.))


~* Maybe that's what Hell is. You go mad, and all your demons come and get you, as fast as you think them up*~

-Anne Rice

Submitted: August 15, 2008

© Copyright 2021 UnspokenSoul22. All rights reserved.

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Vampire Angel

This was really good. The music went well with this. Thanks for letting me know you had a new poem up. This wa SOOO good. Adding the pictures and quotes made this better. I loved the first stanza and how you started it "Voices of those gone scream in agony". But i loved the quote "Life is just one damned thing after another" Great job!:)

Sat, August 16th, 2008 12:14am


=D Thanks.
All I wanted to show people is that even though our lives may be hard, the grass might not be greener on the other side.

Fri, August 15th, 2008 7:09pm

S.C. Kross

Hmm. Loving it.... :) Must agree with ant. Also it was beyond enjoyable. LOL
As always THNX very much for the heads up. When ever you post feel free to let me know. :)

Sat, August 16th, 2008 3:44am


You're welcome.
Thanks for reading it!

Mon, August 18th, 2008 7:09am


wow! absolutely superb! I LOVE it! It's sooo good! This is really random, but i think it could easily be turned into a song or something...hmmm. That's just what i kept thinking. it was REALLY GOOD! I ABSOLUTELY LOVE IT!! Thanks so much for letting me know you posted it!

Sat, August 16th, 2008 8:58pm


Yay! Another person likes it!!

Sat, August 16th, 2008 2:59pm


Well, it was very good. Extremely good, I say. I liked it.

Have you read my poems and novel? If not, do so. And please comment.

Sun, August 17th, 2008 3:08am


=) I think I've read over some of your poems, thought I've haven't commented. I'll get on that, right now. =D

Sat, August 16th, 2008 8:10pm

Balaji Iyer

Very well written mate! That was quite dark... and beautifully written lines...

"Fingernails shrieking as they croon the misery of their lives, Upon blackboards, upon blackboards"

Wow man thats really cool... do read some of my poems... 'Dark Ages' could be your cup of tea~

Sun, August 17th, 2008 4:48am


Ohhh! I enjoy tea! Tehehe!

Sun, August 17th, 2008 5:44am


I agree with everyone it was really good =]

Sun, August 17th, 2008 9:18am


Thanks XLoX.
I'm so glad everyone likes it!

Sun, August 17th, 2008 5:45am


That was actually sorta scary if you know what i mean, Made my skin crawl! I love how you added the quotes! All in all it was awesome!

Sun, August 17th, 2008 10:13am


Ohhh! Spooky!!

Mon, August 18th, 2008 7:07am


this is so sad yet true! i luved it!

Sun, August 17th, 2008 2:15pm


Thanks a lot, Rose =)

Sun, August 17th, 2008 12:12pm


First of all I LOVE this song!! Second, this was beautifully dark. I know I don't make sense, but I really liked it! I'll keep reading your works if you keep writing them!

Sun, August 17th, 2008 2:57pm


Tehe. I also love this song, a delicous masterpiece by Hinder, meh sweetheart.

Sun, August 17th, 2008 12:13pm


the picture is AWESOME!
the words and phrases are rly great

"Till the brightness devours its meal."
i absolutely love that line =]
the whole thing completely blew me away ><
and i love the song!!
what's it called?
excellent work =]
take care ^^

Sun, August 17th, 2008 3:11pm


The song is "How Long" by Hinder, who also wrote the popular, "Lips of an Angel." =)
Whoo..It blew you away like a tornado? Whoa!!

Sun, August 17th, 2008 12:14pm


Another bloody brilliant piece. The structure and form was outstanding. I am honestly awestruck, your poetic prowess far exceeds my own. =^.^=

Mon, August 18th, 2008 2:39am



W-H-O-A! Really? This has to be the most morbid piece of writing I've ever even thought of.

Again, you're flattering me sooo!

Sun, August 17th, 2008 7:42pm


This is really good! Music went well with the poem! Great job!

Mon, August 18th, 2008 4:01am


=) Thanks, Spaxx.

Mon, August 18th, 2008 6:00am


Great job! I LOVED it! I wish I could hear the music...but I will try it later! Good Job!

Mon, August 18th, 2008 2:42pm

Reply couldn't hear the music??
Sorry! =(

Thanks, though.
I hope you can heard the music next time!

Mon, August 18th, 2008 7:46am

Daemonic Resplendence

That's a cool poem. I liked the subject and the expressions.

Mon, August 18th, 2008 5:10pm


you don't know why you get these morbid moments?...i can anwser that for's called..watching too many horror movies...or just plain humanly curious...lolz...your pick...
but i liked it anyway lots of thoughtful details..

Tue, August 19th, 2008 2:57am


I guess it's curiousity, well, since, I haven't watched a scary movie in a while! =/ Lol!

Tue, August 19th, 2008 5:32am


i love this poem not because it's the kind of thing i usually like but because it consumes the reader it the darkness it's describing. it creates a overall feeling and atmosphere of it's own that lingers long after the last line is read. The music worked well to enhance this.
this poem truly is haunting.
and the poetic techniques themselves are used like well sharpened tools creating a brillaint masterpiece.

Tue, August 19th, 2008 10:14am


Ohhh! I /haunt/ people..Wow.
I'ma god ghostie.
Thanks, Wings.

Tue, August 19th, 2008 5:33am


it sure is morbid...may be this way u r able to vent out ur inner self...don't stop

Fri, August 22nd, 2008 5:58pm


wow...that was really good! it was kind of depressing, but not really. i liked it. can u check out some of my stuff, particularly my novel??? thanx.


Sat, August 30th, 2008 2:25pm


Thanks and sure!
I'll read your novel.

Sun, September 21st, 2008 9:42am


your photos really fit with the poem. good job.

Sun, September 21st, 2008 4:22pm


Thank you. =)
I searched around to find the right photos to bring out the morbidness.

Sun, September 21st, 2008 9:30am

Dark Skylight

This was reallly really awesome!!Love it.Great work.
And I liked that song.Can u say who is singing it,lol?.Thanks.And I like your poems.They're really beautiful.

Sun, September 21st, 2008 7:37pm


Thankies =D
Umm...It's Hinder, the group/guy who remade the song, "Lips of an Angel". The song?? It's "How Long". By the way, I'm soon going to get a playlist started on my blog tolet people see the songs that I'm using for my poems. =)

Sun, September 21st, 2008 12:44pm

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