Tides.

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Just read it, please.
I'll answer all your questions honestly.

If you're rating me, please be harsh,
and constructive criticism will be taken seriously.

Please be respectful.

Peace!

I told him I loved him
but he acts like a demon.

I'm sick of him. I don't want him, anymore.

He is rat poison.

poison my lungs and my heart. fake pain I'm immune. Let him grovel for forgiveness.

I won't forgive him.

I've already moved on.

I am the ocean.

just another tide... it does not matter to me.

Submitted: January 29, 2008

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Helene Lepee

Meh, It could use some work. It just sounds too cliche. But keep working on it. I think it has potential.

Tue, January 29th, 2008 4:43am

beyonder

it sounds like ur a bit angry at someone. good metaphor, just expand it a bit more :D
Peace to you too.

Tue, January 29th, 2008 6:26am

poewhit

A new CHAPTER of your life book - keep reading on.

Tue, January 29th, 2008 2:35pm

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