My suicidal Note

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Horror  |  House: Booksie Classic

This poems tell you the true feelings of someone wanting to comit murder but has never done it.

My Suicidal Note
If I had to write a suicidal note
I'd be all about how much
I'd been betrayed trough out my life.
I'd blame my parents for everything.
I'd express my loath for this unforsaken world.
If the time came where I had to actually
Commit suicide I'd do it at the heart,
Tis the core of my emotions and the cause of my pain.
Although I may have thought about it,
I have not yet commit suicide
Maybe I have too good of a heart,
Or I simply haven't had a hard enough life,
And who knows maybe a power greater
Than me is keeping me from doing it,
Maybe soon and very soon I might reach
My boiling point and shall be set free from this cruel world.


Submitted: May 08, 2009

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DeathAngel

Amen.

Fri, May 8th, 2009 10:37pm

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Thanks

Tue, June 23rd, 2009 6:12pm

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Nasani

Really Expresses Your Inner Feelinqs ...

Sun, May 10th, 2009 12:24am

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thanks thats what i was hopping for

Sun, May 17th, 2009 2:54pm

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Chrysta

This is interesting.I have a poem much like it called "I'd cut myself but it hurts too much", Where a person dies when cutting too deep,when in reality,they weren't ready to commit suicide.

Mon, May 11th, 2009 7:41pm

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that sounds cool I'll check it out

Sun, May 17th, 2009 2:53pm

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Vampyre Princess

10 out of 10.... really great piece.
if you were interested i have angry emo cutting poems
and a novel about vampires
hope you do take a read and do some comenting
thanx
dannielle

Wed, May 20th, 2009 6:57am

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I'd love to I'd definitely check it out

Thu, May 21st, 2009 10:26am

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JenDamsel

great work. i like how this person kinds of knows or think that is going to commit suicide if someday get to reach a 'boiling point'. i think is interesting how it says that maybe life hasn't being 'hard enough', a little masochists of this person. but i must be sadist because love this piece.
~Jenn

Thu, June 11th, 2009 2:14am

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I worked really hard on this poem and Analyze every definition of this book, I was mostly proud of the mystery behind the feelings of the poem.

Thu, June 11th, 2009 1:16pm

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Brian W

Most people have these thoughts cross their minds from time to time. You have captured the feeling well in this. Well written

Tue, July 14th, 2009 12:26am

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Thanks:D Im proud to have been one of those people who unregretibly experienced that at a moment in my life, and was able to express it through my poetry.

Mon, July 13th, 2009 11:38pm

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palewriter

This poem is really deep and shows a shadow of doubt in your mind about really wanting to do it. Alot of people think about it, I have too. Life has it's peaks and it's vallys and we have to learn to roll with it, cause that's the way life is. A greater power IS watching over you.
I have a poem called --The angel of all my tomorrows-- and it was written from the viewpoint of someone who wanted to die but was paralyzed with fear. He was expecting the loved one in the grave to magically make things better by coming out somehow.
Always remember that it would be wrong to kill yourself and this goes to whoever else is reading this.
Keep writing.

Sun, August 2nd, 2009 12:25am

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Thanks. I fully understand where your coming from and I'll be sure to check out ur poem as soon as possible:)

Sun, August 2nd, 2009 12:53pm

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AYYYitsSARRR

honestly.. thats really good. the emotion in it was just.. riveting. again, great job. :)

Mon, November 16th, 2009 12:31am

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Gracie My Dear U aren't so bad yourself! Kisses!

Mon, November 16th, 2009 2:28pm

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the bastard

don't kill yourself hun...you'll be back again

Sat, December 5th, 2009 9:29am

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awww thanks gla to see u care

Sat, December 5th, 2009 10:58am

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