The Person That I Love

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Romance  |  House: Booksie Classic

This is my entry for Page Turner's Challenge :) It's based on Drops of Jupiter by Train.

For those who know the song, it is based on the death of the lead singer's mother, who died while the singer was on tour.

The poem is about this man who's loved this woman since the moment he laid eyes on her. She loves him as well, but the thing is, people are different. She loves him more that he would ever know but she has different ways of conveying this love.

Because the Man (for lack of a better name :p) can't understand what the word "Love" means except when it applies to him, he decides to portray her the way he feels adequate.

Feel free to interpret it the way you please.
The woman is portrayed as a villain because she loves this man in a way only she can comprehend, and the Man suffers under the spell of this woman's love, an altogether difficult thing to overcome, especially when you want someone so badly that your bones ache when they're not around to love you.

Like a mirage her silhouette stumbles through an eerie dawn, just devoid of obscurity.

My hands extend before me, Mistresses of themselves while I have been forgotten.

The pearls strung round her neck are chains that bind her to this Earth...

She lingers.

 

My breath comes out in shags, ripping the atmosphere with its intensity; unforgiving.

Strength in abundance; torrid faith in hopeless beliefs; tolerance and sense of hope; I envy the living.

Tantalizing sunsets set off beginnings and endings. They torch ways through the dark,

While my mind like a sponge looks to quench wherever it can, looking, ever seeking a spark.

 

Her ego is a stone wall stretching across this empty world ergo she shan’t let me leave her to her demons.

In the distance a mist forms and disguises her completely, taking hope; or that which at all remains.

"I hurt," She whispers, all the time. Her voice echoes in my mind, light and curious like a bell with ragged edges

She cuts through my entire soul with the might of her will, always wanting!

 

Her vivacious spirit never whole but wholly ruined, the very epitome of lost innocence, of tarnished things...

Her various personalities come to life in the face of nothingness. They grow faces as well and duel!

Oh, to behold that clash and live again! Oh, to live again is an abnormality of the highest degree!

To wake up every night, or morning (I know not to which I wake) and behold her, waiting for me...

 

Her ears pink from the frost in the air like linen stained by blood

And her mouth breathes life into her body, ever swallowing air with a feisty Greed.

Her Greed seems learned and civil, never showing lest it’s supposed to

But her Relentless nature does make sure to compensate this good with evil.

 

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Ugly invisible hands prod and push, puncturing protruding holes in my retreats.

The days are as hideous as the withered scraps left of her "soul", and they are as wanting as her countenance,

But as breathtaking as her face - that face that haunts me in my sleep and forms, dilapidated but alive, in my wake.

Her Fearless Spirit and unrelenting Rage remind me that I am nothing, everyday. Nothing to her but The Person She Loves.


Submitted: August 01, 2011

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Rubberducky

awww... its wonderful, sad but wondurful. such amazing imagery.

Tue, August 2nd, 2011 9:35pm

Author
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Thank you for the comment, I appreciate the honesty!
Yeah, it is kinda sad... I was channeling Train when they sang Drops of Jupiter, so I'm glad that the mood fits well!

Tue, August 2nd, 2011 3:00pm

islander8

Wow...you have written something truly beautiful...good luck with the competition :)

Wed, August 3rd, 2011 7:15am

Author
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Thanks for the comment! I'm so glad you liked it.
And thanks - I'm going to need it!

Wed, August 3rd, 2011 2:14pm

pan12

this one's really good..keep writing!

Wed, August 3rd, 2011 9:18am

Author
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Thanks for the comment pan!

Wed, August 3rd, 2011 2:14pm

Addictedtobooks

WOW! It seems like an entire story being told but not told, it reminded me a little of Keates. It had a really creepy resonates through out. I imagined that they were on a desolated moor with lots of mist and fog so you can't see anything very clearly so the lines of reality have blurred, the protagonist was a ghost and the woman for some reason in the past had sold her soul so in doing so was bound to stay within the confines of the moor. Anyway that's how I imagined it. Truly a work of art, you are really talented keep it up! I'd be surprised if you didn't win the competition!:D

Wed, August 3rd, 2011 12:42pm

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It's really weird because that's exactly how I envisioned it too!!! I'm glad you understood it, I was afraid I was being too evasive and that it might be a complicated read.
I'm honored, really x) I'm happy that you liked it! Thanks for reading Addicted, you're awesome.
And as for the challenge... *fingers crossed*. There are a lot of really good writers in there! :)

Wed, August 3rd, 2011 2:13pm

xComplicationx

Gosh! So talented my friend! Every sentence gave a huge impression on me! good work! :D

Wed, August 3rd, 2011 11:39pm

Author
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Thank you so much for checking it out, and I'm just relieved you liked it :)
Thanks again for the comment!

Thu, August 4th, 2011 3:51pm

bookieA

I'm not sure why i haven't seen this before and i'm always on your profile...... this is beyond amazing!! I love

Fri, August 12th, 2011 4:54am

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Haha thanks Peace!

Fri, August 12th, 2011 1:21pm

Kenedi

Sorry it took me so long to get to your request:(
I love this it's really really good

Wed, August 17th, 2011 6:54pm

Author
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No problem - don't worry about it. Thanks for checking it out and your comment means a lot.

Glad you liked it!!

Thu, August 18th, 2011 8:32pm

PageTurner

... WOW.
I am seriously stunned.
Your vocabulary is so huge! I'm jealous *_*
And somehow, your writing style on this poem reminds me of Shakespeare!
Seriously, this is one of the most beautiful poems I've ever read. It has such imagery and such emotion that it's undeniably unique :D It has such a nice flow to it, too.
I especially love the part 'taking hope; or that what at all remains'. I don't know why - I just love it ^.^
An incredible poem! I love it to pieces :D
Good luck in the contest!
xx Paige

Fri, August 26th, 2011 5:25pm

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Aww thanks Page!!! (|^.^|)
Stunned is good, right?? :p
I can't believe you like it that much!! It feels good to know that the hours and buckets of sweat (and blood ^.^) that went into this weren't wasted :p
I'm glad you liked it :D :D
Thanks for reading!!

Sun, August 28th, 2011 2:01pm

Hinoglue

Great! Good luck! Well... you probably won't need the luck I send.

Sun, August 28th, 2011 11:15pm

Author
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Thanks!

And trust that I will - there's some really good writers in this contest ^.^

Mon, August 29th, 2011 7:39am

Daisy Noelia Flores

wow its amazing... i love it. its so beautiful

Mon, August 29th, 2011 3:50pm

Author
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Thanks for reading! :)

Mon, August 29th, 2011 6:59pm

kashia

Oh wow, your usage of words is... AMAZING!:o :D
I love it so much!!
But, hehe english is not my native language and I had to dive into my dictionary few times...;P
All in all I read it three times because I so much wanted to picture every little part of it:))
And the way I see it right now IT'S JUST SO GREAT!!!
So thank you for showing me your poem:D
Good luck!!

Mon, August 29th, 2011 4:38pm

Author
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Thank you for the honesty Kashia! I appreciate that you liked it that much! For someone whose native language isn't English, you speak it well friend! Thanks again for the comment and tell me if you post anything on Booksie - I'd love to read your work :)

Mon, August 29th, 2011 7:13pm

Govet19

amazing story into poem that's so Great job

Mon, August 29th, 2011 5:10pm

Author
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Thanks!

Mon, August 29th, 2011 6:59pm

YouBleedJustToKnowYourAlive

wow, I really love it.
Thanks for telling me about it.

Cat Youngs

Tue, August 30th, 2011 7:24pm

Author
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And thank you for the comment! Glad you like :)

Tue, August 30th, 2011 5:36pm

Vampire slayer

wow! That was such an amazingly written poem. I apsolutly loved it the story the emotions, everything. you have really come along i was just passing to see if you had anything new and i can say it was not a disapointment. you are such an amazing writer keep it up!

Fri, September 2nd, 2011 9:23am

Author
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Aw, thanks so much Vampire!
I'm glad you liked it XD

Sat, September 3rd, 2011 5:39am

MyMistakeMyHeartbreak

___Wonderful i love it. :)

Sat, September 3rd, 2011 8:04pm

Author
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Thanks! I'm glad you like it! :p

Sat, September 3rd, 2011 5:12pm

SilverWolfGoddes

Amazing! i dont know what to say to this only that i stopped blinking and breathing while reading and didnt resume until i finished... wow! yes its that good!

Sun, September 11th, 2011 7:43pm

Author
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THANK YOU!!! *Grins stupidly* haha this comment made my day ^.^ thanks for reading as well :)

Mon, September 12th, 2011 4:40pm

RLH

WOW.
I've always loved this song but never knew that this was what it was about! Wow that's really sad what happened to his mum. But this poem.....Oh My Lord this was brilliant! It was really haunting and made me stop breathing and thinking. Just...woah...really this was so good. And what's worse is that you're in my group! Eh, it deserves to win 'cos it's so so good!!!

Mon, September 12th, 2011 3:26pm

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Hahaha really? Thanks a million, it's not like I slaved away on this one, PSHK!
And ahha GO BLUE TEAM!
I bet it isnt really that good and whatever you have is amazing but you do get points for modesty ^.^ +5 +5 +5
haha I'm definitely returning the comment so just tell me when you have anything new up for the contest!

Mon, September 12th, 2011 4:43pm

Virtual Writer 2010

haha Omg sorry RLH I totally confused my contests! It's GO TEAM PINK!! haha I hadnt even seen the new page but I'm heading over there right now :p
Sorry!!

Tue, September 13th, 2011 12:44am

forbidden secrets

Oh my god that was utterly beautiful. The imagery you have throughout the poem makes it come to life. I've never listened to that song, but after reading this poem I think I'll go search it up tomorrow and listen to it! :)

Tue, September 13th, 2011 6:32am

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Hahah thanks FOrbidden, I'm glad you like it!!! :D :D *screams in silence*

Tue, September 13th, 2011 7:52pm

Corr Zauber

Wow I love this :) the imagery is so beautiful and it's filled with emotion.

Wed, September 21st, 2011 9:56pm

Author
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thanks COrr!! :D

Thu, September 22nd, 2011 8:06am

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