Sun Like Moon

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

i saw this kinda moon while walking n it jus made stop n jus stare @ it ........

sun like moon

I walked down the foot path

with trees on both sides

it is dark except a few light poles

the wind blows,trees whisper

i saw it the first time

'n' it took my breath away

it shone gold among the dark gray clouds

such a sun like moon

never seen anythng like this before

then lil' by little the gray ,purplish clouds

startd to cover the moon

but even now it looked gorgoeous

with the veil

shy but strong..it glowed

perhaps it knew...

that it was the chance it'll never

get to awe innocent passerby

like me...

n' then she shone never like bfore ...awing everyone

who looks at it

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ALLRIGHTSRESERVED...


Submitted: March 16, 2010

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poewhit

Paints a pretty picture

Tue, March 16th, 2010 9:46am

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thnx..........

Sat, April 24th, 2010 12:57am

VJAMRITA

thnx...........

Wed, March 17th, 2010 7:25am

Dreaming

Few spelling mistakes, but that's not a problem. You sure painted a pretty picture, just like poewhit said. :)

Thu, April 29th, 2010 9:14am

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awwww.....thnx.......

Sat, May 1st, 2010 1:45am

Colin David

Very nicely written. I often stare at the moon on a clear night. This poem captures the feel of those nights well, i think :) Thanks for sharing it!

Fri, April 12th, 2013 7:06am

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thank you so much! i loove the moon

Fri, April 12th, 2013 12:06am

Sabareesh Narayanan

keep it up ...
want to read other works too..soon..
pls return the favor so i can learn from you.

Wed, May 22nd, 2013 2:50am

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there loads of other work ty :)

Wed, May 22nd, 2013 7:58am

utkarshkohli

Nice imagery..
i like poems with simple words..
Gets the point across fairly easily..:)
Keep it up..

Mon, July 1st, 2013 6:05pm

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thanx :)

Tue, July 2nd, 2013 12:26am

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