sun like moon
I walked down the foot path
with trees on both sides
it is dark except a few light poles
the wind blows,trees whisper
i saw it the first time
'n' it took my breath away
it shone gold among the dark gray clouds
such a sun like moon
never seen anythng like this before
then lil' by little the gray ,purplish clouds
startd to cover the moon
but even now it looked gorgoeous
with the veil
shy but strong..it glowed
perhaps it knew...
that it was the chance it'll never
get to awe innocent passerby
like me...
n' then she shone never like bfore ...awing everyone
who looks at it
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Paints a pretty picture
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thnx..........
thnx...........
Few spelling mistakes, but that's not a problem. You sure painted a pretty picture, just like poewhit said. :)
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awwww.....thnx.......
Very nicely written. I often stare at the moon on a clear night. This poem captures the feel of those nights well, i think :) Thanks for sharing it!
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thank you so much! i loove the moon
keep it up ...
want to read other works too..soon..
pls return the favor so i can learn from you.
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there loads of other work ty :)
Nice imagery..
i like poems with simple words..
Gets the point across fairly easily..:)
Keep it up..
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thanx :)
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