Poem by: whiteroses
Submitted: March 23, 2012
Copyright © Whiteroses 2012
© Copyright 2016 whiteroses. All rights reserved.
aww.... it's fine sensei...everyone do that to themselves...humans like imprisoning themselves (like me) It was wonderfully written!!! I liked(=loved) it ^_^
The start was so powerful. It looked spontaneous, and in the middle, for reasons unknown to me, I felt the poem lost its track. But, it was, nevertheless, a wonderful piece of work!
Take care, sissy :)
and you felt it cuz it was a random poem :P
THERE'S A RAINBOW! I LOVE RAINBOWS! WHO DOESN'T LOVE RAINBOWS!?!? YES, I AM KINDA HYPER - prob because I've been depressed all week, LOLLL! ANYWAYZZZZZ! I really loved it. It's so inspirational and beautiful, Rosie! U HAVE LOADS OF TALENT!
this officially cracked me up XD
thank you really?? you think so???
I really like this poem. It's simple and very appealing. The visual element is the star here; it complements your poem greatly. That's the right choice of image to sort of "carry" the poem, or else the reader can't imagine the scene. I love it that you compare the sky to your own life. That's well done. You are right, the sky, or heavens, or universe, is perfect the way it is. Nothing for it to be done. But comparing to your life, you agree that nothing's wrong just like the sky, that your existence is an honor from your lord. It's just...something about it that you yourself have to change, but your existence isn't to be blamed, just like the stars not blaming one another. That's just brilliant! I love it! Very brilliant.
The last line, "within these four walls" sounds better than "within these walls four" or maybe it's a mistake? Well done. Cheers!!
LOL thanks G
no I meant to write it this way :P
Omg. It's so pretty.
Seriously. You always make your poems so super pretty. The picture totally relates to the story, how it's talking about the night sky and all.
Once again, your poem writing skills leave me staring at the screen thinking 'FML'. LOL. What I mean is, I don't think I'll ever be able to write a poem like this.
AND IT RHYMES!
I don't fully understand it, but that's just me. I'm bad with poems thus my inability to write them.
GREAT WORK. ONCE AGAIN!!!!
awww thank you1!!!
love u babe
What should I say..? Out of words, actually! ^_^
The picture was so awesome that I really wanted to glide over all the place... Since I wasn't able to do it, your poem carried my away over the rainbow. It was enchanting... Actually, as I was going through the stanzas, I felt myself slipping from the VIBGYOR hues to a tired island called PARADISE! It was wonderful! The lines were actually more than these words can explain!
Keep smiling, keep dreaming, keep writing...
With deepest love,
Your friend, always,
You are incredibly sweet!!!!
thanks for these truly amazing comments xoxo
Damn, what a muddle head I am!
LIKEY LIKEY LIKEY!!!
LOOOOL :D thanks
Completely enjoyed! Very well written, an amazing writing and just was caught by my eye extremely well :)
awww thank you very much Acie :D
Well Well Roja Toja its been a while since I have been commenting on any works and its nice to come back to your poems again. I loved it as always and and yes if it werent for the pain, you wouldnt have felt the love and happiness so dont give up yet :p. Blah blah hehe I LOVE YOU!!!(I meant the poem) very amazingly written and oh loving the backround too!! Xx
I LOVE YOU BABAN LAKA TAKA :D
yeah i agree and I know I love you was for the poem :D
This poem stands out among your latest posts!! Its a poem with hope, the message is just great to say the least!I am really short of words... I wish I could pen something like this, something that would take away the feeling of hopelessness and despair.. Keep up the good work! :) :)
OMG ur WAYYY better than me...
BELIEVE IN YOURSELF LOL!!!
This is amazing! I love every line! "And live my life instead of just exist" Powerful!!! I like that you put it in a picture!! Love it, KMU on new poems!!!!
awww yay hehe thank you
I thought the poem was powerful and very well-written! Love it! XD
thank you soo much!!
And along came a fair lady
as fair as my eyes could bear
who talked about sweet and tough in the same breath
who took my hand and walked me through-
hills,valleys and to the rainbow
singing about the beauty of being my own person
allowing me to feel hope, strong and fast
showering the love she thinks I deserve
she came back with more bags of hope
having left me with just enough to live without her
she now persuaded me to break my own walls
and break I did, with her by my side
I know I'm the worst poet in the 'her'story of the world...but your poem just inspired me to dedicate my entire life at your feet. The rainbow afar inspired me to listen to your words with my soul as opposed to my head. I love you, I love you, I love you. More than them,I love your words, your soul and heart. Truly, your poem gave me lots of hope and you gave me the inspiration to break my own walls and be my 'own' person!!
P.S. You're my hero!
I love ur poem
This is so pretty :) keep writing deary; you're amazing!
aww thank you so so much
you have no idea how much it means to me that u said that
That is quite simply brilliant.
thats so sweet of you hunni...
thank you so much!!
hope youre well
xoxo Rosie xoxo
Hey rosie its been to long so much has happened including
I had a baby girl august 12th I hope ur doing well I love
this poem! Glad to c you've continued to write!
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