Poem by: whiteroses
Submitted: March 24, 2012
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oh you have some lovely heartfelt lines in this poem and what a pretty way to display it ....
aww thank you so much!! xoxo
Wow! WOW! WOW! WOW! I swear to God, tears appeared. Excellent piece of work Rosa. I love this to the core, top-bottom, bottom-up, side-to-side, every bit of it that i can devour.
Can I say your presentation is unbelievably fantabulous? Well done.
I love this (it's your best thus far) so it deserves a better review:
"I Wonder" is a daring piece of poetry that gives a sense of personal relation where one can relate and shows us a perfect glimpse at a universal, conflicting gesture from a character towards another. This poem is a part of many parts from the Romeo and Juliet universe.
It's raw. It's poignant. It's powerful. The first line starts off strong, because we all wonder what it would be like, if so and so. Universal. To describe someone in mere words does injustice. That's true, because we want more in something, in a relationship, in a reward. Is it good? Is it bad? But it sure is universal-we all think the same, and "all" is another word for majority.
I love this piece Rosa, because the line "But our eyes meet from afar...I see a sadness unmatched; I see who is scared" This feeling is projecting towards me, as if the character is talking about me, because I'm scared and nervous to say something (you know, eve?). But of course, the character might mean different. That's the beauty of it.
The last 8 sentences as a whole is the pinnacle of "I Wonder" It's message is strong, daring, and I think of myself as the character, blaming something or someone else because I wished it were different. The last two sentences, are as if you wrote this to say something. It's like it's planned.....like I was the character talking and at the same time the other. You know about my story with eve, and I think this masterpiece is here to confirm what i'm hiding. Beautiful.
I underestimated you. I have nothing much to say. Powerful. Masterpiece. Universal. Universally good (okay the first 3 words are better, not the last).
Good work. Keep writing. Cheers!!!
1st of all G, as much as I would have liked to be inspired by you :P um, you werent my source of inspiration on this one...
I love you comment it so amazing and out shines my poem anyday ahahah!
Nice poem nice presentation. I like seeing something different. Very much enjoyed! Well done.
thank you so much!
Gosh you GG! I can never near your excellence. Though I didn't read that comment, I know that was a top-notch review - much to my dismay.
Well, forgive me for having wasted a comment space for i'm not good at poems... I feel this looks so pretty! That's all I can say (oh! I speak like a schoolgirl?)
And wow Rose's in "love mood???" Errr, no, no, it doesn't seem to include your friends in this! Don't you lie to me, sister >.<
Take care, sister, and gosh you, GG!
thanks Im glad you like it
and YOU ARE NOT BAD AT POEMS!!! >.<
lol school girl :D
no no this HONESTLY isnt about me... I swear!!
its about this friend of mine from uni :P LOOOOOOOOL
Gosh GG? LOL
Firstly, the set-up was amazing...The fact that it was on a "scroll-y" or script type thing-y.
Your poetry flows so nicely, I feel absorbed in the content...
Usually I'm not not one for love poems, but this one isn't your typical frilly "I love you" stuff...
This is awesome work! Sorry if I babbed on and on...
thank you hunni!
It was beautiful! I liked it sensei! And how would anyone feel love if it isn't accompanied with suffering? That's the beauty of love!
:D thank you so much Jinnie :D
some dont need to suffer :)
This is very amazing! I enjoyed it from the time I started reading to the time I finished. This is excellent :) Like the style it's on too :)
awwww ur too kind Acie...
thats amazing coming from you!!
Beautiful, Rosie. :( It breaks my heart to read this. XX
aww thank you
please no heart break PLEASE
I LOVE YOU!!!
Amazing work!! The fact that this poem is based on the experiences of a friend of yours makes it all the more special, cause its really hard to portray someone else's feelings.. And you've done an excellent job! Good luck for your future writings! :) :)
Wow! Really amazing poem! :O And even more amazing is that instead of typing it down, you uploaded a scroll with the poem on it... sweet! :D
awww thank you hunnni!
really nice.. and way you present this...amazing work ..
thank you very much!!
wow this is really good,
i was wondering if you could check out my new book (house of anubis season 3 ? would be great if you commented your tyhoughts on it
Hunni, i am sorry but i can not take any more novels now...
if you have anything else for me to read, i can but no novels :)
thank you again! xx
Very well done, love the scroll.
thank you soo much!
oh this is unique i love your style :)
thank you very much!
This poem was, indeed, skilfully written, and amongst the most touching I've come across! (Well, I just guess the punctuations were missing except in the last line...) Still, your flow of the poem overcame it!
Craftily told, this piece has that power to take me down the rabbit hole whenever I begin! POWERFUL!!!
Your friend, always,
OMG thank you soo much!! Willie :)
What a touch of elegance to have the poem inscribed on a scroll...beautiful! Eloquent choice of words and a romantic, profound creation of poetry...
I can just conjure a scene in my mind of a messenger delivering this in a bass, melancholic voice!
thank you so much K i love ur wording on this comment!!!!!!1 xoxoxoxo
This is beautifully written! Love the descriptions/detail of the poem and like the background you gave it! Wonderful!
Thank you so much!!
Nice poem, Rosie.
Sorry it took me so long to read ypu wprk, I haven't been online as musch as I've hoped to be over the past few weeks.
aww thank u sooo much!!
Its ok hun no worries :)
OHH someone is in lovee someone is in loooveee!! lalala ting ting!! :D...shh keep it between us too okay!. I wonder how you do those backgrounds not fair hmmph but above that all your poem was even better its so amazingly written and hurts to see you sad :(. Keep up Rosa Cosa its just beyond words how you do it ;).
PS: Me familiar with who you are talking about..I swear I will break *** legs!
looool this isnt about me its about a friend of mine in uni, he is going through something similar but alhamdulillah its sorted!! :) love you asi passi ;) heheheh and i know u would! Come to sudan already!!!!
Oh my God. Oh my God. Oh my God. I think this is my favourite poem from you.
Seriously. This was amazing. I totally loved this! I can just picture this happening, and it makes perfect sense in my mind.
Gossshhh. This seriously is AWESOME.
Wait. I'm going to go back and read it AGAIN.
Urgh. This is actually inspiring. It's emotional, and something people can relate to if they understand what it's about.
This is my favourite poem from you! And it looks totally amazing by the way. I love how you present your poems.
PLEASE. KMU. Never stop writing poems!!!
your comments always put a smile on my face :P
really you liked it? going to read it again O.O whoa!!
thank you sooo much you have no idea what this means to me :D
tc and will do :D
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