Poem by: whiteroses
Submitted: October 12, 2011
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AWWWWWWWWWWW! I LOVE IT! XXX
thank you hunni!1
Amazing! I love the words you penned for your picture, and the background is totally awesome. Great rhyme scheme and the imagery is well placed. Very good indeed.I love it!
Awww really!!! Thank you sooo much!!!
Your poem told such a sweet story - loved it!
ITS OFFICIAL!!!! I COULD UNDERSTAND POEMS!! AND YOURS IS BEAUTIFUL!! i always thought u r great...nope..u r awesome...the thing is u r great at wrting a poem which tells a story...i mean, there are a few poets who could do good with an idea, a few with a thing or a story..u belong to the third class and i'm extremely proud of my big sister...u did absolutely great here...:)..i love it..and 'i like it'...i hope u win..seriously, u must win..
lots of love and immense joy..and lots of accolades for u...love u for u...xoxoxoxo...
heheh thank you *blushes* you are too sweet swetha!!
I love you too and YAY!! Im glad you liked it!!
This is beautiful *hugs* LOL...now my losing is guaranteed.
awwwhhh thank you!!
yours is WAYYY better!!
I was cold; yet the feeling came from within -- You manifest your poetic esssence to the peak here! Wow, I opened my mouth wide in astonishment.
A greater connection I couldn't find! - Give up denying. You're surely highly creative!!! Connection, but that can't be found (just a feeling is there)! My gosh... You peaked!
Haha dearrrrrrrrr!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! This is soooooooooo freaking beautiful!!! I will KILL you if you deny that.. As long as I can guess, I can assure you that you'll win. But--- Yes, i know. Win or loss never matters to you; what matters is that you could paint your emotions! Gave your emotions a definite dimension... I get that haha,
Shows your serious longing within! Yeah beautiful poem, like you... This type of poems are called 'dithyramb'. (err, I think so! I saw that word in someone's comment on someone else's writ haha)
LOVED IT TO EXTREMES...
(you'll hate hugs and kisses, especially from boys--from me. So, just claps and bowing dowm)
Take care sister :)
awwwwwwww THANK YOU!!! SOOO MUCH ARUN!!!
ahh this is too sweet of you!!
yeah I dont think Ill win but I do it for fun anyways!!
yes no hugs and kisses thank you!! care care!! xx
I've come upon this lovelyest of poems...and was totally drawn into it's bliss...
from beginning to end, enthralled by a sonnet...
composed of music and ending in a kiss...
this was absolutely, without a doubt one of the most...beautiful poems you've ever written...thank you for bringing this to my sight...TAGS...
TAGS!!! you are amazing!!!!
really?? you think soo!! ahh ur sooo sweet!! xxx
This is just fantastic, Rosa. It is perhaps one of your best poems ever written. I mean that. It's well written and told, rhythmically consistent and week; that is, it's so romantic! The scene and action are well described. You incorporated few important elements (his warmth, guitar, jacket, etc.). I like the picture you chose-it really goes well with the poem. This is really good. You should win. No...you HAVE to win. If you don't then Booksie is about to be on lockdown. GG will neutralize one chimp after another LOL.
Well done. Cheers!!
awwwhhh GG!! thats really sweet of you!!
LOL, romantic??!! really!!!
you honestly think so??? COOL!!!! hahahah
no DAMAGING BOOKSIE G!!! I AM COMMANDER ;)
OWWWW I hope booksie doesnt cut my comment short..YOU HEARD THAT BOOKSIE!!!!!!!!....ARRRRGGRGRGRGRGRGRR...SO SO SO I mean well well well what do we have here.OOOHHH YOUR BACKGROUND ALWAYS AMAZING EH!!! and the words they where so DEEP that my heart was on the floor.SO AMAZINGO aooogah roja toja jaba laka jkdfsb...I LOVE IT AS ALWAYS LIKE YOUUUUUU MY darling WIFE *smooch*...Thanks for the poem BTW yes I will show you our favourite place in the WORLD!! ;)
AWWW I dont think he will ;)
hahhaahah you threaten too much ;)
awww thank you sooo much hahaha!! really o_O u think soo??
AOOOGGAAAHHH JABA JABA DING DOOONNNGGG!!!!! thank you wifey ;)
hahahah no smooch *runs away* hahah no no!!
ROJA TOJA xxx
hehehehehe taking advantage of this ALWAYS DOOOOOOOOOOOOOO........WE THE BEST LALALALALA!! cant remember the song
LOVE YOU!! xxx
Wow!Fall into love with this one.So creative with a new background pic.It's unique.Rosa rock.:)
Awww thanks Tuppa :D
AAAWWWW, this is BEAUTIFUL! It has this lighthearted feeling to it, that I always find to be so eye catching in poems! I couldn't ask for more than that! Absolutely exquisite! The rhymes, the rhythm, everything's just fantastic! LOVED IT! Fitted the picture perfectly!
Take care, Rosie! :)
Awww thank you alice!!
soo sweet of you!!
I am jealous. How could you write such lovely poems??? It's so well-written, so smooth and the ending so sweet. :) Honestly, I was smiling throughout.
I wish you all the best in the contest, lovely!
Aww thank you babe!!
nothing to be jealous of!!
I haven't seen the others but I'm sure you're going to win!!!!!!!! And I'm being totally honest! This poem was so sweet and it flowed well with a clear narrative structure! I haven't even started my entry for this competition!!! I don't know how to use my stimulus...
I'm so doomed!!!
You're going to win. I'm sure of it!
AWWW really Bree? You think so?? Aww thats sooo sweet!! I personally dont think IM going to win sooo many amazing entries :D
and btw yours will come out WAYYYY better than mine!!
love you hun!! xxx
Not really into romance; the promise of belonging to someone for eternity and not finding purpose in life due to lack of love disturbs me.
I was a beautifully crafted story, but I got pulled away by lines like "That I contemplated suicide a bit." That made me loose sympathy for the girl, made me think she was a selfish being with no ambition in life.
The male traveler on the other hand was the best character portrayed, mysterious and artistic. Though his description was too cliched. I wish for more diversity in the characters, like if the boy was a traveler he probably had facial hair, messy hair, dirty cheeks. Also a different skin color or any realistic imperfection would do. What this does, aside from adding originality, is show love that ignores physical appearance and focuses on the interior.
One of the reasons romance does not appeal to me is that there is this undertone for excluding physically imperfect people, and people with dark colored eyes and common traits. All I keep seeing are people with features of supermodels and light-colored eyes.
Besides that, like I said, the piece is as good as any romantic piece can get and it matched the title just well.
LOL!! okay V!! its A POEM HAHAHH!!!
can add THAT much info... if it were a short story; Id agree
thanks for reading and for your input!! x
Awwwwwww! I'm smiling like a fool right now!!
I absolutely LOVE how your poems tell a story and make sense.
Making sense is the most important thing in poems to me. LOL.
I felt so WARM and LOVED while I was reading this! It made me wonder if I would ever meet a guy with an acoustic guitar who could write songs... Drool. LOL...
It kind of gives me hope, you know. To have an awesome love story in my life, or at least to know someone who has one similar.
I really like how the picture TOTALLY relates to the poem. Like. Full on.
I personally really enjoy your poems because they have a perfect combination of a story and emotion. =)
Totally loved this poem =D
How on EARTH did you manage to make it rhyme?! Usually when I do that I just pick a random word that doesn't make any sense... but rhymes. Lol. You have a good vocab!
GOOD LUCK! I bet you'll be in the top 3! Eeeep!
I'm off to LIKE this poem right now!
Please KMU =)
awwww thank youuu ssoooo much ash!!
I honestly dont know what to say so...ILL GRIN LIKE AN IDIOT!!!
:D :D :D :D :D :D
OMG!!! I'm a NINJA o.O
Hey Booksie! Long time no see xD
MUAHAHAHAH! People will SO never guess who I am >:)
ROSIE ROOS! YOUR POEM IS AWESOMEEEEEEEESAUCE :D (Yup, I got that word from Nicky... It's contagious :P)
I LOVEEEEEEEE The rhyme ^.^ I know poems tecnically don't HAVE to rhyme, but it's always just that LITTLE bit more fun when they do :D
And AWWWWWWWWWW, the story was so sweeeeet :) Like candy! Or ice cream! Or CHOCOLATE PIE :P *Drools*
And I ALSO love the picture, and what you did with it ^.^ *COUGH* Talented! *COUGH*
If you don't win, I swear, the jury is corrupted >:( ACK! Ninja ***** will bring justice :P (A Ninja never reveals her name xD)
Anyways, SUPER AWESOME SUPER POEM! What? I said SUPER twice? No, that must've been your imagination xD It's an illusion! AN ILLUSION!
Okay, Ninja ***** is leaving the building ;)
Katching! *Awesome super ninja super jump away in the dark*
OMG NINJA XD I LOVE YOU!!!
hahah anonymous message ;)
Rosie, my dear, this may have topped all of your other poems. =] This is absolutely wonderful, amazing, and just plain cool. Great job keeping the storyline short and sweet (quite literally) and the flow was perfect and constant. Wonderful!!! Great, amazing, fantastic job!!!
Awww Ali!! REALLY *eyes shining* you think so???
:D :D :D :D
I don't know what to say that hasn't already been said, beautiful!
awww thanks MIKEY!!! :P hahah
OMG i love it
awww thanks maystar :D made my day ^___^
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