Poem by: whiteroses
Submitted: February 01, 2012
© Copyright 2016 whiteroses. All rights reserved.
Awwww... Rose, that was sad =(
'Of ignoring me one day and then suddenly your Queen.'
I know what this is abouuuuuttttttt.... *Gives knowing look*.
But this was so.. Touching. This is a really good way to describe how the main person...
... Is feeling. I mean, I felt like I could understand everything.
AND OMG. This is romantic!!! I love romantic poems! Eeeeep!
I actually understood all of this! And I usually suck at understanding poems.
Great job. This might be one of my favourite poems from you =)
awww lol!!! thank you!
and nah you dont know what its about... just silly writing :P
yay!! you uunderstood :D :D :D :D
thanks and aww really??
WOW!! Rosa my eyes were filled with tears, though the tears didn't ooze down to my cheeks. TOOOOOO BAAAAD!! :D
This is perhaps the best poem you've ever written. There is strong emotion and revelation, so strong you want to reread it again. I especially love the 6th stanza/para. Very well done. It's just plain and simple, with words so powerful. It really says a lot. A LOT! And I also love the visual element, which makes it an exciting piece to read. Well done again. Cheers!!
aww thanks GG!!
hahahah you are crying?! hahahhah i knew u were a softie!!
:D :D :D
At two places, semi-colon is wrongly used. In 1st verse and in last verse. Both should be replaced with comma.
Last part: I'll cherish. Supply the apostrothe symbol, else it looks like 'ill.' And I think it should be 'depths,' plural form, right??? Am I being too OCDish?
The flow of the poem is wonderful. It helps the reader read with ease without putting any effort at all. The rhyme scheme (or) syllable-match adds to that readability.
The character that is portrayed is a little confusing, a bit illogical. She craves for him initially when he ignored her, and when he wanted her, why would she repel? This was explained by self-blaming, but I wonder why she became that. She repels when he notices her, yet in the last line it is evident that she's still in love.
Do you see the conflicting characterization here?
It is sooooooooo great to see you comeback from your terrible negligence. Or was it just writer's block?
Whatver it is, I'm glad you wrote this. I'm glad something had induced in you to write this...
I like it. Very emotional.
Keep writing (just a suggestion, ok? I'm NOT ordering.)
Take care :)
okay 1st of all... the semi colons were put on purpose :D
they were necessary :D
i dont think it was supposed to be depths... a soul is singular :D
hmmm i thought i did... oh well :P
the character IS confused... she knows she loves him... but the fear of him coming and then leaving again; makes her not want the attention in the 1st place.. hence the confusion...
thanks...yeah bit of a dry spelll... no inspiration... the problem was writer's block :P
This one is so beautiful mushkie sensei ^_^ awww.....you sure are in love...may Allah give you what your heart desires!!! Amen.
This one is your most beautiful poetry mushkie sensei...keep writing such beautiful poetry...and keep guiding me towards them!!!! I can't stop myself from re-reading it over and over...and I don't know why..it got me so emotional!!!
I loved it but gave it only an I like it vote
awwwww thank you JINNIEEE!! *hugs* looool
Insha Allah we ALL get what we desire and may they be the best thing for us :)
ah... i dont know if ill write again but eeh :)
P.s. IM NOT inlove :D
Good romantic poem, I like it :)
Omigod, this is absolutely AMAZING.
I loved this sooo much Rosie, and I am SO SO SOOO jealous!! D:
Sorry for the utterly rubbish comment, I'm so tired I can't think straight :P
awwww thanks babe!!!!
not rubbish at all; though i dnt like the jealousy thing...
Excellent poem; it's too darn early for my brain to think of something clever to say, so great job!
lol thank you for reading it mike... means alot!!
Awwwwwww I on the other hand did not cry one bit hehe(joking)...someone is IN LOVE IN LOVE IN LOVE IN LOVE LALALA SG SG SG SG SG SG...hmmm you know you YOU tu es jolie mwaah very very...merci merci for siz beau wirtten poem very fantastico mwaah....hehe me not french siz iz why si me speak like siz you know why because I lost my words...very emotional so deep in my heart *ouch* I will faint now 3 2 1....mwaah au revoir :'(
SG= yuck!! lol ewwww how could you.. yucckkk!!
im not in love :P why does everyone keep saying that *eye roll*
merci beaucoup pour le commentaire... je suis tres joyeux!!
*comes to house and wakes you up* *gives you something for the headache* :D xxx
It's so pretty... (poem and picture!)
As always, your flow and rhyme were excellent!
Although, I must admit, I think it feels kind of... average. Like, your poetry skills are great but the content and ideas seem like they've been done... a lot.
I know, I shouldn't be talking because my poetry sucks.
But this IS well written. No doubt about that.
thanks... n i agree :P
Wooohooo!! Bravo! What a grand come back!! This poem was just beyond awesome!! Every single line is so deeply mesmerizing that I just don't have words to describe how I'm feeling right now!! You are really a gifted poetess!! Keep that pen moving Rosa! You have a long way to go!!
:D :D :D :D thats soooo sweet of yoU!!
thank you for your really amazing comment!!
im not gifted... you are WAYYY better!!! :D
lol well more like my fingers (i dont write poems I type them ^^)
i hope the long way is filled with good for everyone insha Allah :D xx
BEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAUTIFUUUUUUL! I'm a freaking romantic! I'll come back again,ok? But listen. keep writing! And try to help me with poetry. I wanna write but I can't!!!! LOL.
lots and lots and lots and lots of love, to my fave fave fave fave fave faaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaave sister, *hugs tightly*
*blushes* you are too cute :D :D :D
sure sure no worries :D xxx
Why so romantic all of a sudden ? *waggles eyebrows* tell tell...
The poem was beautiful (like always) and you have once again proved that you are truly the queen of poetry.
I LOVEDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD it b.t.w
Awww tru :D :D :D
lol ive always been a romantic :D
thank you babe! xxx
Hey, Rosie! I'm back! Trust me, I couldn't wait to come back. Your poem just wanted me to stay right here before the desktop and stare at it endlessly. I literally feel pink stardust oozing from the picture. Like it's a blessing for me, because I'm the love-starved girI! I LOVED THE POEM THAT MUCH!
Firstly, her Majesty of Poetry, Rosie, I salute you for dishing out a romance poem which I can relate to with my eyes and ears closed. I know that feeling you wrote in the poem although I personally didn't feel it.
Secondly, the rhyme scheme. Seriously, Rose, you NEED to help me with this poems business. Your poem just keeps knocking the wind out of me.
Thirdly, "your attention I crave; your love I desire" Exactly. That feeling I know. *sad grin*
Finally, "Regardless of the...........you are the one for me" I could listen to that stanza in repeat for a thousand times. That's so touching and speaks to me about that unrequited love. OOOOH, there's a reason unrequited love is considered the greatest love on earth!
Do not listen to Arie's confused review. the conflict in characterisation? Of course, little romance novice he is, he wouldn't understand. Take dear old GG's lovely comments into account and smile the day away. LOL.
P.S. this is freaking BEAUTIFUL! I'm sharing this on FB!
Lots of love, XOXOXOXOXOXOXOXOXOXOXOXO
loool Welcome back!
aww really? heheh i actually cannot believe your comment when I read it!
her Majesty?! O_o :P really?!
yeah the 6th stanza did it for me as well :P
really? it is? LOL
ARIE heheheh well... he had his reasons :)
LOL yeah I MADE GG CRYYYYY HEHEHHEHHE!!!
thank you!! but heeeyyyy fb?!
Wait, haha! Lol, I thought it was Izzy (Iris) who wrote it 'cause she posted it on facebook. Lol! Just delete my previous comment! I'm stupid. >.< Anyway, it was still breathtaking and beautiful, I absolutely loved it. I'm really jealous. Okay, I gotta go. Take care! xoxo
LOOOL i thought that might happen LOL..
*HUGZ TIGHT AND NEVER LETS GO!* ROSIEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE! NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!
*STARTS CRYING!* It's so sad!
you made me laugh!!!!
relax *hugs back*
honestly all of you have your theories on whats going on :P
I luv this. Actually, words cannot describe how much I luv this. It's seriously professional! You need to publish this in a magazine. For real. No joke D:
KMU on your poetry and anything else you write because I bet it's all fabulous! - Jamile
this is soooo incredibly sweet of you!!
really you thinnk so O_O ur the 1st person to tell me that actually :P *blushes* ahahahah
will do :D
thank you soo much again!
That was so cool. The background was amazing... I couldn't pull it off!
It;s so sad though:(
But I do love it(: KMU on any new poetry or other work(:
Aww thank you hun :D
well written ... loved the image
thank you so much!
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