Dining Out

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

Observation on self-inflicted suffering

Dining Out

 
Dark-faced stinging eyes


Scalding first then freezing pain


Eating jealousy

 

 

 


 


Submitted: April 02, 2012

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Harry Gosling

I love this! Nice one!

Mon, April 2nd, 2012 9:56pm

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I think I did the unthinking thing and answered like another commenter! So, thanks again, Harry. Kindest regards, Connie

Mon, April 2nd, 2012 3:39pm

californiadreamin

Nice. Very vivid. :)

Wed, April 4th, 2012 4:01am

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Been there, done that. Baaaadd for the digestion. - Thanks.
Best regards, Connie

Wed, April 4th, 2012 8:19am

dibbledabble

Great insight into the darkness one can carry in their soul. Not only that but an excellent haiku.

I have been studying how you write them. They are not as easy to create as they look

Dibs

Sun, April 15th, 2012 12:54pm

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That one just blurted its way out. Not to say I ever.... !!!
Thanks, Dibs. Just give it a try. Five syllables, then seven, then five again. Bet if you took your spider homework you could find one lurking that'd be easy to work... Thanks again, Connie

Sun, April 15th, 2012 8:23am

CAROL MEINGART

Great haiku with piercing contrast...so enjoyed it. Carol

Fri, April 20th, 2012 3:20pm

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Thanks, Carol Much appreciated, Connie

Fri, April 20th, 2012 10:48am

CAROL MEINGART

PS...Ever try "Tanka?" It's 57577 instead of just 575 and also fun to do. Carol

Fri, April 20th, 2012 3:22pm

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Ohhhh... Oh, Lord. I'm going to be working at that obsessively now. I think I thank you! Oh what fun... Many thanks, Connie

Fri, April 20th, 2012 10:49am

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