Sumertime Heat

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Literary Fiction  |  House: Booksie Classic

Summertime heat and kids in the park and malicious tricks

Heat of Summer

The park is hot summer hot and all the kids are playing with other kids that the moms know when suddenly there are new kids in a group and all the other kids go racing to  see what’s up and her son her next to the oldest son is first to get there and see that one of them is holding a covered box and offering peeks inside and her son the next to the oldest one is bravest or most foolish and says he’ll peek and the cover is lifted but barely so her son puts his face down real close and the boy pulls off the cover and puffs hard into the box blowing white powder right in her son’s eyes and he is screaming with his hands over his eyes and she is running and an old man is running too and he pulls her son into the men’s bathroom and holds her son’s face down while he runs the water hard yelling open your eyes open your eyes and splashing the water into them and it isn’t until somehow they are all at the hospital all four of her sons and her and the old man that doctors say it was quicklime and if the old man hadn’t acted fast her son her next to oldest one could have ended up blind


Submitted: March 19, 2012

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BITSxOFxKINKY

thats scary kids dont think about danger until after the fact ... whos to blame .. the person that didnt dispose of the box ...

Mon, March 19th, 2012 4:59pm

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thanks, tracey
Best regards and hope your health is all good again
Connie

Mon, March 19th, 2012 10:02am

Mike Stevens

Kids, huh? Excellent story!

Mon, March 19th, 2012 5:33pm

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Terrifying, when it happened! About the time I was deciding to leave the Big Apple for a more bucolic setting!
thanks, Mike
many regards, Connie

Mon, March 19th, 2012 10:48am

dibbledabble

Sounds like a true story, hopefully not. Kid can do the most stupid things. I don't ever recall doing something malicious but I sure did some stupid things. It's part of the learning curve of life. Hold about I still do stupid things!

Dibs

Tue, March 20th, 2012 12:35pm

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It was. With four young sets of rooster glands (boys) there were lots of true stories, horrifying true stories. Distrust is I guess something that must be learned the hard way, but a sad lesson it is...
And hold about -- I too have my share of stupid doing. Age doesn't cure that.
All best regards, Dibs. Connie

Tue, March 20th, 2012 9:28am

moonphish

wow...that was short stark and scary

Tue, March 20th, 2012 4:43pm

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How it lived, too. Lots of boy traumas with four of them playing king of the hill and exploring life and themselves in NYC. Lots of trips to ERs.
Hi, moonphish. Thanks for the hint on Caleb - he is something else!
Kindest regards, Connie

Tue, March 20th, 2012 10:05am

Irwinagain

Lovely. Genuine 'Flash Fiction', or in this case real life, but written in the correct style.

Tue, March 20th, 2012 5:22pm

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Never even heard of Flash Fiction until I saw it in the summary of someone else's writing. I like this style. It cuts out all the authorisms and feels clean. thank you, Irwin. I am learning and your comment is inspiring. Thank you. Connie

Tue, March 20th, 2012 10:27am

moonphish

caleb is certainly not the most communicative fellow....hasn't responded to any comments or fan requests....but the dude can surely write

Tue, March 20th, 2012 5:48pm

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That's reassuring since I am/have done both - but, as you say, the dude surely can write! C

Tue, March 20th, 2012 12:06pm

californiadreamin

I love this style Connie. Not a punctuation mark to be seen! That so adds to the urgency of it without hindering the flow. Terrible incident but wonderful story. (hope that didn't seem callous) :)

Wed, March 21st, 2012 3:41pm

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Not in the least. and the style belongs - or I ran into it - on the site of someone called dadio and if you find this style as fascinating as I do, check his writing out. His voice is distant and clear and his style(s) lend a lucid light to poignant snips of what I believe to be his own life or drawn from observations and experiences of life.
Thanks for commenting and I am delighted the style spoke to you, too. The urgency is fun to write even when the content is harsh. It is truth but distant. Try it out, cali. It's fun.
Warm regards - good to see your name! - Connie

Wed, March 21st, 2012 9:59am

Insane Membrane

oh ... what a nasty tale but I like how you wrote it

Thu, March 22nd, 2012 3:37pm

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Thanks, many thanks for the read and the comment.
Kindest regards, Connie

Thu, March 22nd, 2012 8:56am

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