Before I Fall

Wow, this is really really good. Don't worry it sounds ok. I absolutely love how it's written and the words you have used (I don't know if that makes sense to you... I'm trying to say something about the metaphors used) The imagery is absolutely amazing. Please tell me when you put something else up because I would love to read it and be happy more than happy to comment!
Never give up!!

This is very good. I liked it alot. I'm not sure what it is that doesn't seem right to you but i absolutely adored it. Keep writing and don't stop no matter what! :]

whoa! this was really good! Can't wait until another poem :)

i really like this one. Keep up the great work. let me know when you write another one

wow that was really good i liked it a lot!!! i always envy people that can write poems cause i can't write a poem worth crap.

VERY GOOD , JUST LIKE THE REST YOUR GOOD KEEP IT UP SJ

I think its really good, there's nothing wrong with it in my opinion!

What's wrong with it? This is awesome! :] I like it

DUDE!! This was awesome!! I absolutely loved it!...Nice job! I feel like that a lot as well..especially in my nightmares..

.:XxJessxX:.

Great analogy of a situation! I like it!

THANK YOU SO FREAKIN' MUCH! For asking me to read this, this was amazing, great job :P

love it....keep on writting no matter what buddy
with love

This poem was really really really good =]
The emotion of uncertainty and fear seemed to ring in my ears when I was reading this... nice =D

I don't know about "something doesn't seem right" because it sounds awesome (to me anyway)

Thank you for asking me to read this- it was really worth my time! Please tell me if you're going to write another poem... I'd love to read it!

Thanks!
~^.^~

I like this poem but maybe it would be better if it was longer or more drawn-out to increase the sense of distance, the rhyming couplet at the end does bring it to a very satisfying close :)

perhaps the bit talking about '...locked myself inside' needs expanded on so that the focus of the poem is not changed as drastically?

hope this helps :)

This was amazing! I loved it so much! Wow is all I can say!

this is a really good piece! i like the rhyming sceme! very well written!

also the pic you chose is sweet too

?monica

hey emma,
are you kidding?, that was BRILLIANT!!!! wow, dude! I really liked it, flowed really well.. and like... WOW!!!!! xox love ya xox jen

(for some reason i couldnt comment while signed in... stupid computer)

your uncertainty is touching
the hearts of many,
But be aware,
you should have not any.
If it hurts so much,
Just let go,
Don't be afraid
of what's below.
If possible,
someone will catch you,
and if not,
Don't be blue.
We, your readers,
Are here for you.

thta was realy good, and amazing, to. a sense of how one would feel... lve it!

Once again it was amazing. Nothing seems wrong with it to me, but maybe it was that this poem is sorta darker than your last two and your just not used to it or something