Before I Fall

rebekahBlaue

This is very good. I liked it alot. I'm not sure what it is that doesn't seem right to you but i absolutely adored it. Keep writing and don't stop no matter what! :]

J R Sweazey

whoa! this was really good! Can't wait until another poem :)

MaddieTheRebel

i really like this one. Keep up the great work. let me know when you write another one

DeeLee

wow that was really good i liked it a lot!!! i always envy people that can write poems cause i can't write a poem worth crap.

SLJONES

VERY GOOD , JUST LIKE THE REST YOUR GOOD KEEP IT UP SJ

swimFire

What's wrong with it? This is awesome! :] I like it

Jessica George

DUDE!! This was awesome!! I absolutely loved it!...Nice job! I feel like that a lot as well..especially in my nightmares..

.:XxJessxX:.

Kairi

THANK YOU SO FREAKIN' MUCH! For asking me to read this, this was amazing, great job :P

wesa24

love it....keep on writting no matter what buddy
with love

Splendins

I like this poem but maybe it would be better if it was longer or more drawn-out to increase the sense of distance, the rhyming couplet at the end does bring it to a very satisfying close :)

perhaps the bit talking about '...locked myself inside' needs expanded on so that the focus of the poem is not changed as drastically?

hope this helps :)

Bloody Soul

This was amazing! I loved it so much! Wow is all I can say!

Monica Taylor

this is a really good piece! i like the rhyming sceme! very well written!

also the pic you chose is sweet too

?monica

Silver Shadowrider

your uncertainty is touching
the hearts of many,
But be aware,
you should have not any.
If it hurts so much,
Just let go,
Don't be afraid
of what's below.
If possible,
someone will catch you,
and if not,
Don't be blue.
We, your readers,
Are here for you.

kes94kes

Once again it was amazing. Nothing seems wrong with it to me, but maybe it was that this poem is sorta darker than your last two and your just not used to it or something

122333MexicanPeanut122333

Really, really good!
I love the final line; it's a little dark and unrelenting from the rest of the poem.
Merciless writing!
Mexi

ClaryTheTigeress

You are a very talented writer, I really liked this poem! I'm not good at poetry but I will be posting some soon =)

Manders

Hey,
It's really good. Your talented. Sorry I haven't commented eariler but I've had a lot going on. I'll read some more and comment on them.

Brian W

As everyone has said this is a good poem I think the best out of what you have posted so far. Great flow and rhyme. Well written you have a talent.

Companion cube

I adore the whole idea of it. Lovely work.

Zero Saint

That was really good, as for {something about it doesn't seem right.} well nothing really, I find when I write poems, I look it over and have a feeling that something is not right about, but that is the beauty of potery, it never seem complete. What you don't see your readers will, but as a reader it comes out really well.

I will be reading more of yours

~Zero Saint~