Friend No More
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Poem by: XBrokenHeartedX
You're stuck in the darkness.
I'm dragging you out.
You're pulling me in.
Into the unknown route.
The noises are coming.
They're swarming inside my head.
I wanna do so many things.
That may make me turn up dead.
The weight of your problems on top of my shoulders.
But I'm blocked off from solutions by two giant boulders.
Choices keep running all over the place.
But my feet won't move, I can't win the race.
I'm done watching you sink into the cold pit.
I'm done extending my hand just to watch you throw a fit.
I'm done having you pull me down there with you.
I'm done having to listen to you lie, just to get the truth.
Who careds what other people think?
They're not you; they don't care what you do.
You need to ignore; to just pushed them away.
But you just cut your wrists, and here I see you lay.
It's not changing a thing; I don't think you understand.
It's not making you better; you need to take a stand.
The hardships that you go through; they're hard I know.
But don't think you're the only one who has pain they need to show.
I can't afford to hurt myself more.
I can't afford to hold you up anymore.
You need to realize, it's gonna be this way your whole life.
And nobody will stand by you when you take out the knife.
I keep thinking it will come back; for you a normal life.
That maybe I won't keep having to pretend that you're still really my friend.
Because you just keep hurting me; using me like a pup.
I'm getting so tired; I have to stop holding you up.
I'm really very sorry; but you're hurting me every day.
Every hour, every minute, I'm trying to hide the pain.
But I stick with you, because I'm sure that it will mend.
But I just can't take it anymore; I can't keep being your friend.
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Written with emotion and passion. I love the feel to this wonderful poem. I would lke to say keep up the brilliant work...check out my profile sometime ~Twilight. ^^
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Thanks very much twilightangel. Your comment means a lot. Yeah I usually write my best poems when I'm feeling that way, and I was feeling EXACTLY that way. I told her that today, and she understands. Thanks once again!
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you have the spirit of a true friend, i like how you said "you're stuck in the darkness, im dragging you out, your pulling me im" it's as if there really was war. i like it :D
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Thanks very much! I'm glad you enjoyed my writing and that you liked those few lines. I'm glad you read my stuff! HaHa yeah war is a hard thing, but you just got to keep pushing through it.
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Ships pass on the sea of life. PARTING SHOTS
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Your mysterious aren't you? What you say is confusing, but it has lots of meaning. Thanks for your comment, and I think I understand what you're saying. I'm glad you enjoy reading my writing:)
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Hey! Wow! One word - amazing. You really just poured out your heart didn't u? xD
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Yeah i did really just pour out my heart. I usually do that when I write poems. Thnx 4 reading it:)
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its so full of emotions. very cleverly written. A great piece of work.
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Thanks so much for your comment, I'm glad you enjoyed it. And also thanks very much for becoming a fan:) I hope to read some of your work too!
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i like it ! i can relate to it ALot!
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Thanks so much for your comment! I'm glad that you liked it and that you could relate to it. Thanks for reading my work:)
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wow. just.. wow.
It's not changing a thing; I don't think you understand.
It's not making you better; you need to take a stand.
The hardships that you go through; they're hard I know.
But don't think you're the only one who has pain they need to show.
giiiirl, you really know how to show emotions huh? (:
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LOL, thanks so much! You know I think you're my favorite commentor:) I'm really good at writing poems with emotions, but in school I'm not supposed to write stuff like that:( Thanks so much for your comment:)
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Showing confusion...sheesh! I'll post a better comment when the living room isn't full of realy sucky karaoke singers . T.T
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LOL, I know what you mean by that. Trust me, its happened before:) Ha Ha but thanks for reading it and posting a comment:D
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Your ryhme schemes are solid, what great work! I love this poem.
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Thanks so much! I'm really glad that you liked it. And thanks for the comment:]
wow, wonderful poem, i love the emotion. I can relate to it well- almost too well (not sure if that's a good thing) I love your poem!
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Thanks! This happened to me a while back so the emotions are real. Ha Ha I'm so glad that you liked it, and thanks for the comment:]
I agree with everyone, it's really emotional and really almost sweet. I'm not sure if that's the best word to describe it but you must be a really good friend to go through all of that for so long! I hope that things turned out/will turn out OK!
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Thanks so much! I'm glad that you could understand the feelings. Ha Ha, yeah it was hard but I'm managing. Things have worked out fine, and she's much better. Thanks so much for the wonderful comment and for reading! :)
awesome - very deep. :}
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Thanks so much:) Glad you liked it.
Wow, I really liked that! I think we've all had people in our life like that that are constantly trying to pull us down or hold on to us. It's great that you could recognize how much their actions were affecting you!
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Thank you so much for the great comment! I'm glad that you liked it.
This is such a good poem!!!! It's your 2nd best! Painless memories was defiantly ur best!!! Ur the best writer I've ever known!
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I'm sure you've read better, but thanks so much Emily! I appreciate your comment, and I'm glad you liked it. Thanks for reading! :)
wow great emotion zo! this poem really showed how u felt, but in like a mellow sort of way. it was a great read, and u should ttly keep writing:)
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Thanks, I'm really glad that you liked it:)
This poem is taken from personal experience, I would surmise. The word flow is good throughout. Toward the middle and to the end some stanzas seem forced and wordy, easy problems to fix. Overall I liked your work and I'll look at more, thank you. rainy
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Thanks so much for being honest! I appreciate it. Thanks for noticing that, I will definitely try to do better in the future. It was from a personal experience, and I'm glad you liked it! Thanks so much again:D
:) Wow, this is really good. I like how you're putting another persons point of view perfectly which other people generally don't see. My friend self harmed, and I tried to to everything I could to help him, but it felt like he was ignoring me, and the way you wrote this poem is the exact way I felt. =] Well done. x]
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So glad you liked it! I wrote that when my friend was doing those things, and I'm glad that it gave you the emotions that you felt before. Thanks for the wonderful comment, and for reading:D
u just poured out ur heart, didn't u? I feel u girl. It was a toatally amazing poem, loved it sooo much!
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So glad! Yeah I did just pour out my heart. It was a hard time for me, but things are better; that's an old poem. Ha Ha glad you liked it again and thanks so much for the comment:D
wow this is very deep my kind of poem!:)This truly was unique and inspiring.I loved the way you rhymed in this poem and it all made sense and gave a very clear picture. i liked that line "And nobody will stand by you when you take out the knife" genius! Your feelings and emotion was the key to your poem and it was true that you felt that way then, i really love that.
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Ha Ha thanks J, I'm glad you liked it. Ha Ha I was just writing down what I felt at the time, and that whole knife thing was a big part of it. Ha Ha who knew you were so great at giving comments? LOL, thanks a lot again for reading:D
Beautifully written..I can relate to this 100% The way you not only said things so deeply and then rhymed was awesome. Keep up the wonderful writing (:
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Aww thank you so so much! I'm really glad you enjoyed it:)
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