Too young. Too deep in. Too late.

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a 13yr old girls falls deeply in love with a boy, whitch turns into a twisted obssesion. love lust and obssesion consumes her and permenentaly seals her fate.

He smiles at me and the feeling is tottaly over whelming. an uncontrollable spasm shoots through me and my knee's buckle under me. i fall down on all fours into a pool of blood and let my love for him crush me. its only a dream i tell myself, though i can't seem to wake up. around me, bodies of girls who has ever touched him lay dead. bruttaly and ruthlessly slaughtered by none other than me. i killed them. i torcherd them till they begged for mercy. then i torcherd them until they begged for death. i watched them as they gasped for their lasts breaths. then i recorded their last words. stillhe smiled at me. he was oblivious to the dead bodies around us. he was blind to them. he couldn't see what the outcome of my love for him did to these girls. he could'nt see what i did for him. he couldn't see my love. his usually beautiful brown eyes were a dull grey. his pupils nonesistent.he was in fact blind. this must be a dream, i say again though it all seems too very real. he stands there. smiling. unmoving. blind. oblivious. niave. innocent. my sweet innocent boy. the one who knows nothing of my love. my want and desire. there is no setting for this moment. everything is white. i can't tell if we're outdoors or in. i dont care. i let out a low whine. a pained cry of desperation. i needed him. i needed him to the point of self destruction. the first time he broke my heart i knew i was in too deep. i knew i had to quit. to sober up and continue my life. the withdrawl symptoms were to much to handle. i fell back into the same endless cycle of lost love. lying to myself, pretending that he ,on some deeper level ,wanted me. needed me. but i wasnt so niaive. he never failed to prove my lies wrong. so what happended when the lies became to transparent. when i wasnt innocent enough to believe my own lies. iblamed myself. i letit remind me that my pain was real. that i wasnt crazy and that it wasnt all in my head. to want someone to believe me when i say im in pain. to not brush me off when i say my heart is broken. it was my internal cry out for help. if i wouldnt ask for help with my lips, my brain would find another way. a more physical way.

i let out another pained cry. he didnt hear me. he still smiled. one of the girls twitched. no. i thought she was dead. "she" meaning his sister. she got in my way and i was force to kill her. at least i thought i did.he saw her twitch too. though i was sure he was blind, there he was. eyes focused. trying to percieve what he was veiwing. he took a step toward her. i whimpered his nameagain. he stopped. i knew he heard me. he turned to see were the noise had come from .he looked dead at me. his expression confused. he was asking me things. things i couldnt possibly begin to answer. it was a barley audible whisper.... and it didnt come from me. it came from his sister. he turned back to her. he walked over to her. i got up to run after him. it was too late. he was holdind her in his arms. i stopped cold in my tracks. his lips were moving. a low unittelegible whisper escaping them. then he held his ear very close to her lips awaiting her response. i saw her lips move but heard no sound come of it. at that moment she pointed a weak trembling finger in my direction.He looked up at me. his face marred with pain. tears flowing relentlessly down his face. " how could you" his voice high pitched and broken. "why would you," his voice cracking so bad he couldnt finish. just a dream. just a dream. " but i love you..." i began but his pain was hurting me. i was back an my knees struggleing under my own weight. i reached out for him, trying to comfort him despite my own unbearable pain. he flinched away from my touch. a look of desperation on his face. desperation to get away from me. another weight seemed to fall upon me.i was now flat on the ground. my lungs too compressed to expand. i was now gasping for air. " i never loved you," his voice didnt crack that time. it was loud and clear and i wish i didnt hear it. i wished i didnt know it all to well. i wished i didnt know it all along. i wished it wernt true.my heart beat was getting louder and louder, until it was nearly the only thing i could hear. nearly. i could still hear him yelling at me. i could still hear the pain in his voice cutting at me like jagged blades. ripping me apart from the inside out. this pain was way too real. it was as if i actually felt thousands of tiny blades cutting at me.it was all very loud and over wheling. the crushing pain, the blood all around me, the yelling. my desperate heart beat.and i just wanted out. i wanted to die..........................................

and you knowwhat they say,"be careful what you wish for". i got my wish. i was prenounced dead at 3:42 AM. i had a nightmare that sent me into cardiac arrest. it was all just a dream..... a dream i didnt make it out of. everyone was right. i was too young. i was in too deep. and it was way too late.


Submitted: February 10, 2010

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Deathb4Sunrise

wow that was intense, i like. just a couple of spelling errors and captilization mistakes but still a freaking awesome story.

Fri, February 12th, 2010 9:57pm

Freddo

Yah, this was intense, but it was really good. Incredibly sad. Imagine, loving someone so much that you could do that...feel that... So it was just a dream? Kinda confused about that... Brilliant though!!!

Fri, February 19th, 2010 3:03am

bloodwriting

:O
like i said b4...
u rock!
:D
just try to use the spacebar between words and ull do fine! :P

Sat, February 20th, 2010 11:22am

xxxsuclusionxxx

yea il keep that in mind lol. i know everyone is tired of my spelling mistakes. :)

Sat, March 6th, 2010 5:39am

a7xgrrl666

This was really good! Yes, a few spelling and capitalization errors, but hey, we're only human. The emotion in the story was intense and beautiful. You are very talented!

Sun, May 23rd, 2010 6:40am

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aww thanx. it's been a while since someone has actually commented on this story. I was just thinking about the first time my heart was broken.

Sun, May 23rd, 2010 7:37am

Bunny126

love it love it love it i spell wrong no1 reads the crap i write but ur so awsome who really cares thats wat i say its so intense i thought it was real aawsooomme dudette just awsome

Tue, July 27th, 2010 1:21am

Kiri Nelson

One word: Whoa. I had to take a breath after reading that. Just fix up a few grammatical errors and it could be compared to Poe. Wow. Read mine?

Wed, November 3rd, 2010 4:43pm

Kiri Nelson

One word: Whoa. I had to take a breath after reading that. Just fix up a few grammatical errors and it could be compared to Poe. Wow. Read mine?

Wed, November 3rd, 2010 4:43pm

MaXx

That was awesome! Its like i could see exactly what was happening and feel it to. it was really really good.

Sun, November 14th, 2010 6:53pm

cataplunina

i kinda wish i hadnt read that...

Sun, November 14th, 2010 9:01pm

shortiewriter96

this was good. a few grammatical errors, but those are easily fixed. read my material?

Sat, December 25th, 2010 9:17pm

Lillian F Hall

KAA

Sat, February 12th, 2011 6:33pm

jacky franco

LOVE IT!!!!!! Your awesome!! Keep it up11 (:

Sun, March 6th, 2011 5:27pm

sita

very intense sad and i love it though

Tue, March 8th, 2011 6:06pm

Lost Angel

Really great!

Fri, March 11th, 2011 8:30am

miniginga

HI... You need to revise your work. At the moment your very bad. But practise makes perfect... I guess

Mon, March 14th, 2011 10:29am

XxlicaxX

I honestly didn't notice the errors you made with the grammar until I read the comments. I was lost in the story. It was amazing.

Mon, August 15th, 2011 8:33am

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Lol thanx. This acount is pretty old and im a much better writter now. Honostly im going to delete this story

Mon, August 15th, 2011 11:29am

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