The unwritten destiny

Poem by: youfoundme

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Nothing is set in stone just unwritten.

Because it just already started

The unwritten destiny

here’s my dreams, fears and nothing more

Than the unwritten destiny that is;

Planned for me

And it feels like I’m on cloud nine

Nothing is set in stone just let, but I don’t want

This story to end any time soon.

No one else can feel the way I do,

When I’m with you that is why I think

Our love is undefined

No one can speak my words for me,

They can only come out of my mouth.

No body knows what I’m about to say

Because it wasn’t written on a script

This is coming from the heart

Nothing more or less I really do

Feel this way ; I love you ….

So many doors unopened,

My dreams seem so far away

Looking down and there’s no sidewalk

Making the decisions on my own because

Only I can make the path

I can only write my future,

This is my life .

And maybe your be right by my side

To see everything I wanted

Come true

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Submitted: May 18, 2010

Poetry love life destiny dreams unwritten

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Vincey Delaney

oh so beautiful and heartwarming!!! Love it, love it!!!Great, keep it up!!!

Sat, May 8th, 2010 2:30pm

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Thank you for your wonderful comment :)

Sat, May 8th, 2010 8:01am

Vincey Delaney

oh so beautiful and heartwarming!!! Love it, love it!!!Great, keep it up!!!

Sat, May 8th, 2010 2:30pm

Vincey Delaney

oh so beautiful and heartwarming!!! Love it, love it!!!Great, keep it up!!!

Sat, May 8th, 2010 2:30pm

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Thanks :)

Sat, May 8th, 2010 8:02am

Vincey Delaney

oh so beautiful and heartwarming!!! Love it, love it!!!Great, keep it up!!!

Sat, May 8th, 2010 2:31pm

Vincey Delaney

oh so beautiful and heartwarming!!! Love it, love it!!!Great, keep it up!!!

Sat, May 8th, 2010 2:31pm

Kristen45

Lovely poem :) I just have one suggestion: Perhaps in sections where you want the reader to linger on what you say maybe break up sentences into shorter lines. For example,
This is coming from my heart
Nothing more
Or less
I really do feel this way;
I love you

I think something like this just makes it a tad more powerful. Either way it was a fantastic read! :)

Tue, May 11th, 2010 5:03pm

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thanks kristen im glad that you like it :) and thanks for the advise

Fri, May 14th, 2010 9:08am