The unwritten destiny

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

Nothing is set in stone just unwritten.

Because it just already started

The unwritten destiny
here’s my dreams, fears and nothing more
Than the unwritten destiny that is;
Planned for me
And it feels like I’m on cloud nine
Nothing is set in stone just let, but I don’t want
This story to end any time soon.
No one else can feel the way I do,
When I’m with you that is why I think
Our love is undefined
No one can speak my words for me,
They can only come out of my mouth.
No body knows what I’m about to say
Because it wasn’t written on a script
This is coming from the heart
Nothing more or less I really do
Feel this way ; I love you ….
So many doors unopened,
My dreams seem so far away
Looking down and there’s no sidewalk
Making the decisions on my own because
Only I can make the path
I can only write my future,
This is my life .
And maybe your be right by my side
To see everything I wanted
Come true
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Submitted: May 18, 2010

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Vincey Delaney

oh so beautiful and heartwarming!!! Love it, love it!!!Great, keep it up!!!

Sat, May 8th, 2010 2:30pm

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Thank you for your wonderful comment :)

Sat, May 8th, 2010 8:01am

Vincey Delaney

oh so beautiful and heartwarming!!! Love it, love it!!!Great, keep it up!!!

Sat, May 8th, 2010 2:30pm

Vincey Delaney

oh so beautiful and heartwarming!!! Love it, love it!!!Great, keep it up!!!

Sat, May 8th, 2010 2:30pm

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Thanks :)

Sat, May 8th, 2010 8:02am

Vincey Delaney

oh so beautiful and heartwarming!!! Love it, love it!!!Great, keep it up!!!

Sat, May 8th, 2010 2:31pm

Vincey Delaney

oh so beautiful and heartwarming!!! Love it, love it!!!Great, keep it up!!!

Sat, May 8th, 2010 2:31pm

Kristen45

Lovely poem :) I just have one suggestion: Perhaps in sections where you want the reader to linger on what you say maybe break up sentences into shorter lines. For example,
This is coming from my heart
Nothing more
Or less
I really do feel this way;
I love you

I think something like this just makes it a tad more powerful. Either way it was a fantastic read! :)

Tue, May 11th, 2010 5:03pm

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thanks kristen im glad that you like it :) and thanks for the advise

Fri, May 14th, 2010 9:08am

Athena1

awwww that is touching!

Thu, May 20th, 2010 8:39am

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awwh thanks athena im glad that you like it !:)

Thu, May 20th, 2010 6:07am

AnAbellee

A Amazing truly your words are carefully chosen! please check my novel with child by a vampire! thankyou! ")

Sat, May 22nd, 2010 8:14am

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thanks and i will when i have some time . :)

Sat, May 22nd, 2010 11:32pm

xxxPrincessAmeliaxxx

Wow. Your a talent :)
Word choice was spot on, and very beautiful.

Wed, June 2nd, 2010 3:01am

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awwwh! thanks i love that one of my talents is poerty :) have a great day,.

Wed, June 2nd, 2010 12:38pm

Capman

Hey really great message and solid writing.

Thu, June 24th, 2010 4:59am

Author
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thanks you,

Thu, June 24th, 2010 12:31am

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