Cant take it anymore

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

A suicide poem

To much pain
Not enough love
Too much hurt
Not much to heal
Soo much hate
Soo much dislike
I cant take it anymore
You say care
You say you love me
Then why is it Im always in doubt
I cant take it anymore

You'll make it they say
Jus keep fighting
Dont give up they say
Jus keep trying
How long am I supposse to sit here
Waiting for my yellow brick road
A day, A year, A month, well try 6 or 7 years
I cant take it any more

I'm only fiveteen
but what does that mean
Three more years
you'll be free
I cant take it anymore what you've done to me
My pride, my esteem all broken so slowly
My self image my dignity no longer a part of me
I cant take it anymore

I'll look east and I'll look west
I'll look up and I'll look down
to find any way out but the one I've found
I dont want people to hurt from my choice
but sometimes I jus cant find my voice

I cant take it anymore but i'll keep trying
No matter how much I feel like dying
Your words of encouragement keep me strong
Jus to know that not all hope is gone
I cant take it anymore, jus leave mebe
so i can live how I wanna be
I cant take it anymore
But I've promised to try
No matter how much I cant take it anymore
I love you auntie


Submitted: March 21, 2010

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an awk hint

this one is really deep and i like it. a few grammatical errors make it tuff to read fluidly, but i did connect with it. it seems like the kind of stuff i usually write about. nice work.

Sun, March 21st, 2010 9:13pm

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thank you, I'll run a check through it and fix those up.....I apprecitate your comments adn I'll make sure to take a look at your writings when I have a chance

Sun, March 21st, 2010 2:41pm

an awk hint

just remember to try and let your poems be the sad ones, and you be the happy one

Sun, March 21st, 2010 10:06pm

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I agree fully, but most of my poems actually come from my life and the way I feel. they're mostly personal

Sun, March 21st, 2010 3:18pm

i hate kung fu frogs

Wow. I can really relate to this. Other than grammar, this is like a 10/10.
You're really very talented. XD

Mon, March 22nd, 2010 6:38pm

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Thank you...I have a issues with my grammer LOLZ it always happens mainly cuz i hate editing

Mon, March 22nd, 2010 11:40am

SmilingAppearances

awww...

Tue, March 30th, 2010 2:50am

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Thanks :)

Mon, March 29th, 2010 8:04pm

nuttyz

Its really deep..loved it though :)

Wed, April 14th, 2010 10:07am

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Thxx :) Glad u loved it

Wed, April 14th, 2010 12:18pm

Mystic Queen

This is actually a great poem. A deep one too. I wont say anything about the spelling mistakes you made since you have already been told. Anyway all I can say now is keep up the good work!(:

Sun, May 2nd, 2010 11:29am

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Thank you very much..Im glad u liked it...Spelling's not my fav subject as u can see :)

Tue, May 4th, 2010 10:59am

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