A Dream of Waiting in Line

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Religion and Spirituality  |  House: Booksie Classic

A short dream the night of Sunday January 4, 2015

I am waiting in line between Heaven and Earth

God determines a person's purity before admitting each one into heaven or crushing them with his mighty sledge hammer

Anyone not entering heaven is crushed down by the swing of his sledge hammer

God gives a muscular and fit form to his brilliant white garments

Light emanates from his powerful presence

He has an iron sledge hammer with protruding nodules on the ends of the hammer's head

When God swings down on the skull of a person, the protruding nodule crushes further through the skull down onto the spine

The crumbled mess is pushed aside to slide down to Hell

The site and sounds of crushing, crackling and crumbling bones fills the senses of the next person in line

I am a few people away from my turn, but can already hear my demise


Submitted: January 06, 2015

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AsTheWorldAroundMeFalls

I'm kind of glad I'm not much of a religious person (who am I kidding I'm not religious at all) cos I have a bit of an impression of good similar to this, well not this hard hitting and potent, my thoughts are much simpler. I swear I actually felt genuine fear while reading this. The thought of standing in line while waiting for your judgement can really put some almighty chills up your spine. I'm not sure if it is at all suitable to ask but I'm kind of wondering now, are you religious at all? If you don't want to then don't answer, I'm just wondering of course. Again this is another amazing poem, I still have goose bumps. Well done, I mostly hate poetry and you totally turned that around! Kudos :) ~Kate

Fri, January 23rd, 2015 7:27pm

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Hhmm, "Am I a religious person?" Well, yes and no. I do "try" to follow common "good" sense. I attend church sometimes. I am by no means a role model. I probably curse too much. I like to drink. I have fun with sex. So, I don't know really how to answer that question.

Fri, January 23rd, 2015 12:16pm

AsTheWorldAroundMeFalls

*God. Sorry I think my phone is an even bigger aethiest than me XD

Fri, January 23rd, 2015 7:27pm

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It's all good. I like receiving random messages. Woohoo Thanks!

Fri, January 23rd, 2015 12:16pm

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