Is This Death?

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Flash Fiction  |  House: Booksie Classic

I can't think of a good description. Just read it. For Archia's paragraph contest.

Is This Death:

Reaching out, but there is nothing there. I stretch and extend my fingers but there is nothing. I open my eyes. So strange, there truly is nothing. Just blackness stretched in all directions. I can't even see my own hand. I breath in deep and steady and try to stand. The moment I do, I'm falling. There is still only darkness, still nothing. The only reason I think that I'm falling is the wind rushing around me so loud I can barely hear. Then, I start to see light below me. It's coming fast and I'm going to die. I hit icy water, but never find the bottom. When I finally swim up, I am blinded with color.  A hand reaches out to help me from the water and I take it. The moment my hand touches hers, I am filled with warmth and I know all is well.


Submitted: June 25, 2011

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GuruGuy

Wow. Okay this is definitely your ticket to get the first prize winner (shh! Don't tell anyone I said that! hahahaha okay i'm joking).

This is nice; well written and told, exactly like a paragraph with a suspenseful beginning and a heartwarming end. Excellent work! It's ten times better than mine hahaha. Cheers!!

Sat, June 25th, 2011 7:25am

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Ah, c'mon. Yours is really good. The beginning just popped into my head and then the rest came to me as I was writing. I wasn't even sure I was going to get it done on time (I had writer's block really bad). ^_^

Sat, June 25th, 2011 12:30am

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