The Story of Aneres

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Historical Fiction  |  House: Booksie Classic

This is a fictional story about a Greek god I made up named Aneres. It's not my best work because my writing style is romance and I write from first person, but I just want to take a chance and see what others think about it. I also tried to use some old-fashioned words like beseech, to make it sound older. All constructive critiscism is welcome.

Long ago Ruled Aneres, goddess of books and stone. She ruled, with her powers, all of Crete. One day her friend came to her in tears.

"Hades chose Persephone over I, the goddess of light. Anger fills me with hatred. I need revenge," cried Firenight.

"What is this nonsense you speak of! How dare he beseech you to be his queen, and turns around to marry Persephone," Aneres said horrified. "We must besmirch his name!"

The next day, Aneres visited the villagers of Crete holding books.

"Behold be books I created to inform thee about the god Hades. Take them annd spread the word for I am your queen. Once thee read thy books, you shall be intoxicated with truth about the so-called god, Hades," Aneres preached.

The villagers did as they were told, and soon Hades came to collect his share of villagers about to die. He saw that everyone was laughing at him while reading the same book, so he killed a villager and took his book away.

"Who dares besmirch my name with such filth,"Hades yelled.

No one responded.

"I did," Aneres yelled back.

"Then shall you be cursed," Hades said as he raised his hands.

Once Aneres heard this, she used her powers of stone and shot it Hades. Hades quickly dodged it and the obsidian mirror in back of him was hit. Some how the powers reflected back to Aneres and she was turned to stone. Hades threw her in the Meditteranean Sea, and Aneres was never seen again. A week later, Firenight ruled Crete.


Submitted: July 07, 2009

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KazWay

O.O Coooool

Wed, July 8th, 2009 7:19am

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thanx. but believe me its not my best work. i just don't feel safe posting up my best work

Wed, July 8th, 2009 6:51am

Ameliuhh

Wow. And not in a very good way. There are no descriptions. My six-year-old brother could write that, and I'm not joking.

Don't give me any excuses about how 'your best work is not up here for security reasons because people will copy my uh-maaaaazing work.'

Thu, July 9th, 2009 5:55am

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Thanks for commenting! :P

Fri, November 27th, 2009 12:43pm

ZeroG57

One I am Twelve and Two This Was A School Assignment

Thu, July 9th, 2009 3:47pm

aria aiedail

besmirch my name? er, if i were you I'd put something up that's a little bit better then this. If your not gonna share some of your best works then whats the point of having a booksie account? no one wants to read this, it's boring.

Thu, July 9th, 2009 8:54pm

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It's a children's tale :/

Fri, November 27th, 2009 12:42pm

Ameliuhh

Sure you're twelve. I can believe it, many people here probably are. But on your profile you wrote about how amazing you were, so excuses aren't allowed.

Fri, July 10th, 2009 12:47am

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i wrote how amazing i was because many of my friends said my writing was amazing

Fri, July 10th, 2009 7:10am

Shantilove32

Okay, seriously. People, stop beating up on a 12-year-old. Sure, she didn't have to brag on her page, but beauty is in the eye of the beholder. Some people may find her works great. And I for one didn't think it was too bad; it actually did sound like a mythical tale to me!

Good job, hun :]

Fri, July 10th, 2009 3:18am

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thanx

Fri, July 10th, 2009 7:11am

UnderxYourxSpell

I agree with Shantilove32 :) I think you did a pretty good job for someone so young :) If you want this story to reach its full potential then, as Renee White said, maybe you could add some description and develop the plot a bit? I think it's great that you know a bit about Greek mythology (I find it fascinating) and like to write. Skills are developed through practice and experience so keep writing and you'll see how you improve!

Good job, hun :)

Fri, July 10th, 2009 11:20am

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thanx that's why I joined booksie

Fri, July 10th, 2009 7:12am

summerlover

I know how you feel about not feeling safe, but it's okay because you can totally sue if someone copies your work in any way! Everything on Booksie is copyrighted. Therefore, nobody can take your idea. It's like being a real author: If you look on the first five pages or so..you can see the whole copyright thing, and that's similar to how Booksie is protecting your work. Confusing I know, but..the point: you're writings are safe!
I think it was entertaining. It could use a little work and I believe you when you say it's not your best work because I've seen your other writings, and they're pretty good :)Also, the ending is sort of undeveloped..to me at least. It doesn't really wrap up the story quite bit.
Good job!! :D

Wed, September 2nd, 2009 10:02pm

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thank you and coincidential enough, I saw the copyrighted thing underneath something I was reading and I felt safe writing more. Thanks for the comment and I thought I buried this. ;D

Wed, September 2nd, 2009 4:21pm

Mistress of Word Play

A very interesting write. I always did like Mythology. I used to know all the Gods and Goddess' names and the demi gods as well. You did a great job on this.
There are a few typos but who cares.
Really liked it.
Susan

Sat, October 3rd, 2009 8:14pm

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Yeah mythology is rather interesting and fun to learn about as long as you know that it is not real and there is only one God.

Glad you liked it and i got an A- on this.

Sat, October 3rd, 2009 1:51pm

angelcrash14

see, you guys should read feelings of a normal person, and see what could happen if you keep bullying her, i think it's beautiful

Mon, November 2nd, 2009 6:58pm

Author
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lol thanks but it's ok. Not everyone is going to like my stories

Mon, November 2nd, 2009 3:25pm

lolgrl21

It was pretty good, but seemed a little rushed in the ending.. Nice. Job:)

Tue, January 5th, 2010 9:38pm

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Thanks but this is more of a children's tale. Too much detail would probably confused them, but i cold be fallible.

Tue, January 5th, 2010 2:54pm

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