What Happens in the Darkness

Poem by: zoeyraehewitt

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A poem about darkness and night.

Zoey Hewitt

The world is black,

Everything is cold,

Nightmares sprout in children’s’ minds,

The moon is a beacon,

Monsters hide in closets,

Secrets hide and wait to leap,

Haunting cries of owls resound in our minds,

Hiding under the covers,

Light is gone,

Kids cry,

Darkness is another world,

One that no one wants to live in.

Submitted: January 25, 2009

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kitty98

I see the darkness differently but I still liked the poem it shows a lot of imagery and it is kind of scary even if it is short.

Sat, April 25th, 2009 4:44pm

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thanks. i view in a lot of different way sbut this one appealed to me the most. ill have to write one on a different view.

Sat, June 20th, 2009 12:11pm

VampirePriestess

OMG!! I love it!

Tue, May 26th, 2009 3:29pm

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Thank you. I'll read some of your work.

Wed, May 27th, 2009 3:06pm

amero333

What Happens in the Darkness,, hope it stays in the darkness..
luv your work!

Thu, February 18th, 2010 12:55am

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Thanks!

Wed, February 17th, 2010 9:24pm

springsun

Nice!
You had one single mistake, though... "children's' minds" should have one less apostrophe... but apart from that, the text is flawless and a true pleasure to read.
You have a great talent for creativity and a powerful brush capable of painting vivid images in the readers head.
"Monsters hide in closets" was one of my favourte lines. It describes what it feels like to be afraid of darkness, which many children are. I was no exception myself, and I remember all to well how I had to sleep with the light on at times, especially when the wind and rain pounded on the window...
I sill don't feel comfortable alone in the darkness, though. Your poem just put words to that unpleasant feeling of not knowing what secrets and surprises the darkness holds.

Great job!

Thu, November 3rd, 2011 8:57am

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Thank you so much! I'll have to fix that mistake when I get on a computer. I was terrified of the dark as a kid and I still am. Thanks for reading! It's nice to know people like my writing. :)

Thu, November 3rd, 2011 12:28pm